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Roy Inwood

 * Nominator(s): Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:17, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Roy Inwood is the latest in my project to get all South Australian Victoria Cross recipients to FA. Inwood, a WWI recipient, won his VC during the Battle of Menin Road in September 1917, for eliminating a couple of German machine gun posts. He went on to serve during WWII as a military police warrant officer running detention barracks on the home front. Unlike the many Australian VCs held by the Australian War Memorial, Inwood's is displayed in the Adelaide Town Hall. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:17, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Comments Support by CPA-5
That's anything from me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 21:06, 25 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Sailing via Fremantle and Colombo Add Ceylon after Colombo and pipe it with British Ceylon.
 * the ship arrived at Alexandria, Egypt Pipe Egypt to Khedivate of Egypt.
 * I think the Khedivate became defunct in November 1914, so have gone with Sultanate. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:27, 26 August 2019 (UTC)
 * where they entered camp at Mena in the shadow Link Mena if possible.
 * The following month he was evacuated sick to Egypt Pipe Egypt to the Sultanate of Egypt.
 * in a support role when the Germans counter-attacked Pipe Germans to the Empire of Germany.
 * Inwood married Evelyn Owens in 1927 No née?
 * Not in sources. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:27, 26 August 2019 (UTC)
 * I reckon we should split the "Post-war life" section because it includes WWII which was also an important war?
 * elimination of a German machine gun post Machine gun needs an hyphen.
 * Inwood located a German machine gun post Same as above.
 * volunteered for a special all night patrol All night needs an hyphen.
 * front of our line, and there – by his coolness Merge there and by.
 * and this was apparently a happy marriage Remove "apparently".
 * All done, except I haven't changed the wording of the citation. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:27, 26 August 2019 (UTC)
 * G'day, anything I've missed? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:21, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Yes sorry, ehm, I was distracted with the drive and other nominations. I have a deadline before the 3th Quarterly reviewing awards (want to reach at least 100 reviews before October) I also want to work on the drive as much as I can. Of course, I will have time for you guys. I also almost broke your record (84 reviews) of the last Quarterly reviewing awards. :p Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 17:40, 7 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments Support by Kaiser matias
Honestly not really a lot to say:


 * Considering the length of the World War I section, it may be worth considering subdividing it somewhat. For example, Egypt and Gallipoli, the Western Front prior to the Battle of Menin Road, and then Menin Road and VC citation is what I could quickly see as being relevant dividers.
 * Done, broken up by campaign and then by year
 * "While in camp in October, Inwood was charged with absence without leave and reduced in rank to private." Is there any explanation for him being charged like this?
 * No, but plenty of diggers went AWOL when in rest areas, so it isn't all that uncommon, neither is the penalty, as NCOs are generally expected to stick to the rules. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:44, 5 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Also want want to say the lead image is great, exactly what you'd expect from an Australian VC recipient. Kaiser matias (talk) 19:47, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Totally agree, . This is one of my favourites, the crossed arms and slouch hat at the rakish angle make him look like a real character. Thanks for taking a look! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:44, 5 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Awesome, a great article and has my support. Kaiser matias (talk) 16:45, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments Support by Zawed
I reviewed this article when it was nominated for GA and looking it again for FA I see no reason why it should not make the grade. The one comment I have is in relation to "...after another South Australian who won a VC in 1916, Brigadier Arthur Blackburn." Blackburn is mentioned earlier in the article when discussing Inwood's brother who was KIA. I wonder if this could be revised a little to draw a connection between the two mentions; at the moment the second mention seems isolated in context. It may be a bit clumsy so could be refined somewhat, but perhaps something like " after fellow South Australian and 10th Battalion soldier Arthur Blackburn, who was awarded his VC during the Battle of Pozières where Inwood's brother had been killed." Zawed (talk) 02:04, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
 * G'day, thanks for taking another look. I've used the formulation you suggested. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:44, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
 * All good, have added my support. Zawed (talk) 07:06, 2 October 2019 (UTC)

this one is travelling well, can I have a dispension for a fresh nom please? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:08, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Sure, go ahead. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:23, 1 October 2019 (UTC)

Support Comments by Parsecboy

 * The 10th Battalion (Australia) has Ascanius as HMAT, not SS - which is correct? You might also consider adding the ship type for it and Ionian (and Medic later on)
 * What's the average strength of the battalion? When reading the 1916 section, it occurs to me that readers might think "327 casualties...is that a lot?"
 * No idea what he was doing when he was AWOL, I'm guessing?
 * No, probably getting pissed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 2 October 2019 (UTC)
 * "The unit was in a support role when the Germans counter-attacked during the Battle of Lagnicourt on 15 April, suffering only 11 casualties." - this reads somewhat ambiguously - I assume it was the 10th Battalion that suffered 11 casualties, but it could be read as the Germans who did.
 * Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 2 October 2019 (UTC)
 * I wonder if the bit about Arthur Blackburn in relation to Inwood's brother is relevant
 * Added a bit, same battalion, also South Australian. Robert Inwood was actually Blackburn's platoon sergeant, do you think I need to add that? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 2 October 2019 (UTC)
 * G'day, just checking you have seen this? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:08, 7 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Hmm, I'm wondering if it might make more sense to move the mention of Robert up to the 1916 section, along the lines of "...327 casualties suffered by the unit during its first major action on the Western Front, the Battle of Pozières. Among those killed was Roy's brother, Sergeant Robert Minney Inwood..." Another option would be to introduce Robert in the Gallipoli section, along the lines of "...and joined the 10th Battalion, 3rd Brigade, 1st Division, along with his brother, Robert Minney Inwood." Then, you could just mention in the 1916 section that Robert, by then a sergeant, was among the casualties. Parsecboy (talk) 12:02, 7 October 2019 (UTC)
 * G'day, I reckon I might have addressed this now. Here are my edits. See what you think? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:23, 7 October 2019 (UTC)
 * That looks much better - happy to support now. Parsecboy (talk) 14:54, 8 October 2019 (UTC)
 * You might want to link bolsheviks. Parsecboy (talk) 14:08, 2 October 2019 (UTC)
 * All done, thanks for taking a look. Just one query, . Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 2 October 2019 (UTC)

Coord note
Hi PM, bit concerned with this: Rugged, independent and well-built, he gave the impression that his VC "had not done him much good". Firstly, "Rugged, independent and well-built" is pretty much a direct quote from a description in his ADB entry. Secondly, "had not done him much good" isn't attributed in the article or in its source (also the ADB). I think we should know who thought this before we include it in the article; at the very least we should clearly attribute in our article to the ADB. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 11:41, 12 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Good point. Attributed to the ADB. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:57, 12 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Tks PM, good to go now I think. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:10, 13 October 2019 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 06:11, 13 October 2019 (UTC)