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Sacred Heart Convent School (Jamshedpur)
Sacred Heart Convent School in Jamshedpdur, is one of the most innovative and progreesive institutions in Jamshedpur and has contributed to the city's growth as well as its relation to TATA Steel. Graduates are typically well-educated young ladies who are able to thrive in a modern society and at college. Arundhati bakshi 14:15, 28 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Oppose: This does not seem to meet any of the criteria.  Please look at some of the recent FAs on subjects such as this, and then re-write.  References are essential.  Perhaps Peer review or Good articles would be a better place for this at the moment, although even "Good Article" requires reference too. Giano | talk 14:49, 28 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Oppose. This is nowhere near ready to be posted on FAC.
 * No inline citations or reference section
 * Incorrect heading formatting
 * Tons of internal links that lead to redirects
 * Filled with POV and informal tone: "Mother" this and "Sister" that, "young ladies"
 * Grammar and spelling:
 * Sentences begun without capital letters
 * "ran" when it should be "run" (in the very first sentence)
 * "...the maintain the vision of education as the means to transform society." Huh?
 * Content
 * Why are we talking about the history of the school and all of a sudden there's one sentence about how it isn't air conditioned?
 * National Institute of Open Schooling section makes no sense at all
 * This is simply not ready for FAC. I suggest you work on the problems I've listed and then submit the article for a Peer Review before trying for Featured Article status. Good luck! Kafziel 15:03, 28 March 2006 (UTC)


 * Comment. Sorry for wasting everyone's time. Thanks for the advice, but as for the naming of the ladies . . . the school is run by nuns, so I wouldn't be sure how else to address them. Nomination withdrawn. Arundhati bakshi 16:51, 28 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Comment: Have a look at the Hopkins School FAC above to see what is needed for a great school article. Harr o 5 20:10, 28 March 2006 (UTC)