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 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by 10:01, 5 May 2013 (UTC).

SheiKra

 * Nominator(s): Dom497  ( talk ) 00:21, 26 March 2013 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured article because after re-writing and expanding the article quite a bit, I believe that it is at the FA standards. After expanding the article, it was reviewed by Hahc21 for Good article status. After the article passed, a peer reviewer was done by FallingGravity. A copy-edit was also completed by FallingGravity and ‎Baffle gab1978. Finally (just a quick note about its notability), it was the world's first roller coaster of its kind to feature a vertical drop and train type which has since influenced all Dive Coaster's manufactured after it. -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:21, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I generally like the image selection, but what is your opinion on File:SheikraBuschGardens.jpg. It seems (to me) to be the best overall view of the coaster, so is there some aesthetic way to include it in the article? Or a specific reason it isn't included? Chris857 (talk) 02:39, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * The main reason why I left it out is because I don't really think there is anywhere to put it. The main part of SheiKra is its 90-degree drop which is highlighted in the infobox picture so I didn't want to remove it and replace it with the image you mentioned. Also, if I put it anywhere else in the article, the images would stack and create big gaps between the sections of the article (if this isn't really an issue, then I would be more than happy to include the photo). To prevent the gaps, the only place it could go would be under the 'Reception' section though the picture doesn't really have anything to do with the section (Again, if it doesn't matter where the picture goes, I can put it under this section).-- Dom497 ( talk ) 18:49, 26 March 2013 (UTC)

Comments –
 * "but lost these when Girffon and Dive Coaster opened at Chime-Long Paradise." Assuming that Girffon is the same ride as "Griffon", there's a typo somewhere in there.
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Amusement Today should be italicized as a print publication.
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Original attraction: "Rose amended his proposal, making the roller coaster 200 feet tall and adding more features to the ride, a proposal which the executives approved." The use of "proposal" twice is an obvious redundancy in the prose. Try rewording something so this doesn't occur.
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * The modified part needs an apostrophe at the end of "executives". Giants2008  ( Talk ) 01:07, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 01:29, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Was it one executive or multiple ones as implied earlier in the paragraph. If the latter, the apostrophe needs to be moved. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 01:05, 31 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 13:34, 31 March 2013 (UTC)


 * The semi-colon before "both a first for its kind" begs to be a regular old comma instead.
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Three days later, the roller coaster opened to the public on May 21, 2005." This can't be right, since the previous date given was March 19. Again, one fact or the other is wrong, or the "Three days later" is untrue.
 * The March 19 date was the date that only the media could come to the park and advertise/publicise the roller coaster. The 21st was when the ride opened to the general public for daily operation.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * But May 21 isn't three days later than March 19. And how could the media day be held after testing was completed on March 19 when testing didn't start until April? I think you've got a bad date in there. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 01:07, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Can't believe I missed that error. I have fixed "March" to "May".-- Dom497 ( talk ) 01:29, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay, but isn't May 21 two days after May 19, not three? Giants2008  ( Talk ) 01:05, 31 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed (I'm not going to try to explain why I thought it was three :P ) -- Dom497 ( talk ) 13:33, 31 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Layout: reference 1 should be moved to be after the period in its second use here.
 * Done (I think). Can you check where the ref is now? I'm not sure if I fully understand what you are trying to say.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Once cycle of the ride lasts about 2 minutes and 20 seconds." "Once" → "One".
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Records: "In 2005, only two other Dive Coasters in the world had either a 87- or 87.5-degree drop." "a" → "an"?
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Reception: We don't need another Immelmann loop link here since there was one earlier in the body of the article.
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Amusement Today should be italicized in refs 62–69. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 00:34, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 19:14, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * One more thing I saw just now: the all caps in ref 8 should be removed. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 01:07, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 01:31, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Comment
 * In the lead, the first says in which theme park the coaster is located. However, that is not perhaps complete location information. Should not it state which city/state and country?
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 21:57, 12 April 2013 (UTC)


 * location information of Chime-Long Paradise would help, too.
 * Done.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 21:57, 12 April 2013 (UTC)


 * in the first paragraph of history, it says that SeaWorld filed a trademark for the name. So, what happened after that? How did Busch Garden claim the name back?
 * What do you mean how Busch Gardens got the name back and what happened after, all they did was file a trademark for the name SheiKra.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 21:57, 12 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Well, SeaWorld Parks & Entertainment filed for the trademark. But the ride is in Busch Gardens Tampa Bay. So, how are SeaWorld and Busch Garden related? No relationship of these has been mentioned earlier in the article.--Dwaipayan (talk) 00:28, 13 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Ah, that's makes more sense. I have added the appropriate info.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 01:34, 13 April 2013 (UTC)


 * In modified attraction section, why do we need the time of press conference (1030 am)? --Dwaipayan (talk) 03:34, 12 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Just thought it would add more info about when the modification was announced. Is it redundant?-- Dom497 ( talk ) 21:57, 12 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Not redundant, but seemed too much detail. Was it such an exciting event (the press meet) that even the precise minutes and hours will be needed? --Dwaipayan (talk) 00:28, 13 April 2013 (UTC)
 * I've removed the time.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 01:35, 13 April 2013 (UTC)

Support — No visible problems, on terms of prose and fixes of above issues. —  Diva    Knockouts   18:03, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

Graham Colm (talk) 11:54, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
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