Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Sleepless (comics)/archive1

Sleepless (comics)

 * Nominator(s): Argento Surfer (talk) 12:59, 9 July 2020 (UTC)

This article is about a fantasy romance comic released by Image Comics a few years ago. The story features a princess, a magical knight, and a conspiracy to replace the throne with democracy. The article was promoted to GA last October and has been stable since then. After some tweaks today and a search for new sources/commentary, I'm confident the article is as complete as it can be. Argento Surfer (talk) 12:59, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Image review
 * Pass acceptable use of a non-free image (t &#183; c)  buidhe  00:01, 10 July 2020 (UTC)

Source review - spotchecks not done
 * What makes Rogues Portal a high-quality reliable source? Smash Pages? Comicosity? Multiversity? Black Nerd Problems? ComicBook Round Up? Adventures in Poor Taste? Comic Bastards? Nerdspan?
 * Link in FN4 is a redirect
 * Barnes & Noble is a publisher, not a work. Ditto Image Comics, check for others. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:37, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Oppose pending resolution of point 1. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:00, 8 August 2020 (UTC)

Comments from Aoba47
These are my notes for the lead and the development subsection. I'll wait until the source review is completed as it would be better to get the sources cleared before getting into anything with the prose. Aoba47 (talk) 20:17, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I'd link colorist and letterer the first time they are mentioned in the lead. I am not familiar with comic books at all so I was slightly confused when I first saw these words.
 * I would add ALT text to the infobox image.
 * For the lead's second paragraph, I would combine the first sentences into something like the following: (Set in a medieval kingdom, the fantasy story is about Lady "Poppy" Pyppenia the illegitimate daughter of the king, who died just prior to the opening scene.) The current structure reads a little choppy to me.
 * I would say "before the opening scene" rather than "just prior to the opening scene" to be somewhat more concise.
 * I would link "fantasy" to the fantasy literature article on its first mention in the lead and the body of the article and in the infobox. It may seem obvious, but I think it would be useful for unfamiliar readers (similar to how science fiction is linked in the article for The Left Hand of Darkness).
 * I am not entirely sure what this phrase, "try to find their role", is referencing.
 * I am a little confused with the lead's second paragraph. Only Poppy and Cyrenic are named, while the other characters are referenced by titles (i.e. "the king" "the new king's daughter and nephew", "the mastermind). Is there a reason for it? Also, for this part, (the mastermind behind the assassination plot), it seemed weird to not directly identify the villain.
 * For this part, (Vaughn sent del Duca a short list of story pitches from which to choose), I do not think "from which to choose" is necessary as it can be assumed from the context of the sentence.
 * The "Development" subsection uses the word "idea" three times, with two of these instances being in back-to-back sentences, and since the subsection is so short, it comes across as repetitive. I would change at least one of the back-to-back ones.
 * I believe I've addressed most of these. In the second paragraph, I went with titles over names because I thought it would be cumbersome to specify everyone's name and title. I can craft a version with names if you think it would be better. I didn't identify the villain by name because right up until the reveal, he's a very minor character. The summary is a bit deceptive because it reads like he has a big role, but he's really only present in the last chapter. Thanks for taking a look. Argento Surfer (talk) 21:07, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for clarification. I can see your point about the names being cumbersome. I will think on it further, and hopefully other editors/reviewers will look at it too. Aoba47 (talk) 21:24, 20 July 2020 (UTC)

Coord note
Given the oppose on sourcing and the lack of other reviews, I'm archiving this nomination. --Ealdgyth (talk) 14:42, 15 August 2020 (UTC)