Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Susianna Kentikian


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The article was promoted by User:SandyGeorgia 00:07, 25 June 2008.

Susianna Kentikian
Self-nomination. This is a short article I've been working on, which I believe meets the FA criteria. It's currently a good article (see nomination here), a peer review is archived here. EnemyOfTheState (talk) 04:17, 19 June 2008 (UTC)

Support comments An interesting read, since I know nothing about the subject. I thought there was a slightly newsy edge to the text, which occasionally led to infelicities. jimfbleak (talk) 05:51, 19 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments (edit conflict with above; sorry if there are any duplicates) Overall a nice article, thanks for your work on it! giggy (O) 07:27, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * The references need some formatting work... all dates need to be wikilinked (per MOS:SYL). Also, website titles don't need italics (see MOS:ITALICS)
 * Done.
 * "and she now lives with her family in an apartment near her Hamburg boxing gym.[5] She is currently applying for German citizenship.[10]" - WP:RECENTISM... I think you should reword so it's more like "in 2007, she..." wherever possible.
 * The exact time they moved in is not known, so I'm not sure how this could be rephrased. The second sentence could of course be easily changed once her citizenship is resolved.
 * Good point... I suppose if they do end up moving you can change/update it (with a known date), and same for citizenship. Just make sure you do! :-) giggy (O) 13:17, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "which caused additional problems" - kind of a "duh" moment here... I don't think you need to say that.
 * Done.
 * "was stopped following a cut by Zurita" - what's a cut?
 * A cut is a laceration, a rather common boxing term, you really think this should be further explained here?
 * Heh... I was thinking there's a move (like a "hook"). Note to self; be less intelligent. Yeah, not a problem. giggy (O) 13:17, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "The fight was voted among the five "Top Fights of the Year" by WomenBoxing.com." - should the website have italics?
 * Done.
 * "Early on, Kentikian was considered one of the big talents in German boxing" - this implies she isn't anymore...
 * Not sure I agree with you here, but even so, would it be wrong? Once you are an accomplished athlete, you are no longer considered a mere talent, I guess?
 * The way I see it, being seen as a talent is different to being proven as a talent - she's reached the latter now as a pro. giggy (O) 13:17, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * How about "Even at the start of her career, Kentikian was considered one of the big talents in German boxing ..."? EnemyOfTheState (talk) 14:59, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Yup, that works fine. giggy (O) 02:07, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
 * I tried to address your concerns. EnemyOfTheState (talk) 05:38, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Support. giggy (O) 02:07, 21 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * What makes http://www.boxrec.com/index.php a reliable source?
 * Sources used in the article don't need to be listed in the external links section
 * Maybe not, but does it hurt? The Boxrec and WomenBoxing.com links are two informative sites and I doubt many readers go through the reference section to find them. I can take them out, of course, if you think that is necessary.
 * I'm not such an MOS guru that I know if that's a requirement or merely a suggestion. Striking it (grins) Ealdgyth - Talk 19:22, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
 * What makes http://www.womenboxing.com/index.html a reliable source?
 * I can't find anything at http://www.womenboxing.com/Tiger11.htm that indicates any level of reliability, fact checking, editorial oversight, or qualifications per WP:SPS. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 03:58, 21 June 2008 (UTC)


 * What makes http://www.fightnews.com/ a reliable source?
 * Can't even find an about us page, but they seem to be owned by Freitag Marketing Services, which sounds promotional. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 03:58, 21 June 2008 (UTC)


 * I recognize that these websites don't rival the NY Times for reliability, but both are news websites with editorial oversight. Fightnews is the best known boxing news site, while WomenBoxing.com is the leading website on female boxing. They are not blogs or fan sites. The main reason those sites are used is really to increase the number of English language sources; I could probably replace them with German sources, but I doubt that would be desirable.
 * Otherwise sources look good, the links all checked out with the link checker tool. I wasn't able to evaluate the reliablity of the non-English sources Ealdgyth - Talk 13:12, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Boxrec is also used in Michael Gomez, which is also at FAC right now. You asked about the site on the Gomez talk page, and got a response that it was referred to by mainstream media. If it's an issue here, it will be for Gomez as well; if you think Boxrec isn't reliable you should say so at the Gomez FAC too. I'll try to find more media mentions later. Giants2008 (talk) 15:25, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Or, I could just being spacey and forgot about the Gomez one. Not a worry now. Thanks for reminding me. (Work is keeping me hopping this week, so expect more than the usual spaceyness...) Ealdgyth - Talk 16:09, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Regarding the German sources, I can assure you that Der Spiegel, Die Welt, Die Zeit, Hamburger Abendblatt are all respected newspapers/magazines that should be considered reliable sources. Also, almost the same text is a good article on the German WP (de:Susianna Kentikian) which uses the same sources. EnemyOfTheState (talk) 05:38, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Better reliable foreign language sources than non-reliable English language sources, especially as this is a BLP. Ealdgyth - Talk 18:09, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Ok, I replaced all references that used Fightnews.com or WomenBoxing.com articles. I used http://www.eastsideboxing.com/ (and its sister site http://www.boxingnews24.com/) to source the world title fights, because from what I understand, this website was deemed reliable during the Michael Gomez FAC. The only WomenBoxing source that remains is a reference about a "fight of the year" award from that website. If this self-referencing should be unacceptable as well, that sentence must be removed. EnemyOfTheState (talk) —Preceding comment was added at 19:17, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
 * They would be reliable for the fact that they gave an award, yes. All done, looks like to me! Ealdgyth - Talk 19:22, 21 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment Perhaps wikilink the dates and accessdates in the references so they format according to user preferences? Gary King ( talk ) 04:28, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Done. EnemyOfTheState (talk) 05:38, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Support Looks perfect to me, well sourced and well-written. Congratulations! Idontknow  610 TM 17:46, 20 June 2008 (UTC)

Support - I'm satisfied that this is good enough now after the various fixes. This will be an interesting test case to see how a shorter article does at FAC, and I'll be pulling for it. Giants2008 (talk) 02:57, 22 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Query; why are all the publishers italicized in the citations? See WP:ITALICS, periodicals, journals, newspapers and magazines are in italics, websites are not.  Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 18:34, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
 * I fixed that. [You are picky around here, aren't you ;) ] EnemyOfTheState (talk) 19:48, 22 June 2008 (UTC)

Generally support, but still a bit of polishing to do on the writing.
 * "called-up"—not a double adjective, so hyphen should be removed.
 * "But" at the start of a sentence is usually deprecated in favour of "However,". Don't ask me why, but it's a widely observed practice.
 * Usually I think there are too few commas in nominations; here, there are a few too many in places: "Her family received a permanent residence permit in 2005, when she signed a three-year professional boxing contract that established a stable income." And the third sentence at the top, again before "when". And "until she knocked out the opponent, earned her the nickname". I think someone else should go through it with a hawke's eye on those odd commas, although most are good.
 * A distinctly WPian disease I call "startitis": "Kentikian began working as a cleaner". Just "Kentikian worked as a cleaner ...".
 * "as very few boxers wanted to face her"—It's stronger without the "very".
 * Overlinking: Anglophone countries really don't want to be linked even once, but you've done this repeatedly. Nor "Germany" for a second time. These ones dilute your valuable links and splash bright blue needlessly.
 * Table's pretty good.
 * "outside of"—spot the redundant word.

A new person to sift through the whole article would be good: shouldn't take a copy-editor too long. TONY  (talk)  13:12, 23 June 2008 (UTC)


 * I fixed all of that, except for the "Kentikian began working as a cleaner" sentence. Your suggestion would also change the meaning of it: having worked only at the age of 16. EnemyOfTheState (talk) 14:41, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
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