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Talking to Yourself

 * Nominator(s): NØ 18:00, 3 July 2024 (UTC)

This article is about Carly Rae Jepsen's 2022 song "Talking to Yourself". Pride month might be over, but it is never a bad time to listen to a good old-fashioned Carly Rae Jepsen synth-pop song to boost one's mood. Built into an album ironically titled The Loneliest Time is this club-friendly track that still feels underrated even though critics raved about it briefly after its release. At least the Japanese liked it! Thanks a lot to everyone who will take the time to give their feedback here.- NØ 18:00, 3 July 2024 (UTC)

Aoba47

 * The lead specifies that Benjamin Berger and Ryan Rabin co-wrote the song and make up the production team Captain Cuts, but it does say that they actually produced the song.
 * The lead specifies that reviewers praised the production as "infectious and danceable", but I do not see that claim supported in the "Critical reception" section with an overview sentence or another sign that this was a view shared by multiple critics.
 * Siroky and Sanchez called the chorus catchy, and the others said something along the lines of calling it a hit or fit for the dancefloor. I have revised this sentence to a more general one, which hopefully takes care of it.
 * That makes sense to me and addresses my concern with the lead matching with the article. Aoba47 (talk) 14:16, 5 July 2024 (UTC)


 * The Billboard Japan chart placement should be discussed in the prose. I am not sure that a separate table and section are needed for a single chart placement, but even if it is kept, chart placements should be discussed in the prose. You could wait to see what other reviewers have to say about the inclusion of the table and section as it could be just something that I am noticing.
 * I would prefer to keep it.
 * That is understandable. My main concern was the chart placement not being discussed in the prose and that has now been addressed. Aoba47 (talk) 14:16, 5 July 2024 (UTC)


 * I am uncertain about the "embarked" word choice in this part, (Embarked on the Dedicated Tour). I think something like "While on the Dedicated Tour" would be more suitable.
 * I am unsure about the word choice for this part, (creativity was stimulated by the COVID-19 pandemic). It makes it seem like Jepsen was inspired directly by the pandemic itself rather than getting inspired after being stuck at home during COVID-19 lockdowns. I think that this part could be worded better and more clearly.
 * The "endured bereavements" wording seems a tad over-dramatic, and I think could be replaced with something else.
 * For this part, (She worked with several producers and created more than 100 songs), I am not sure the "with several producers" part is necessary. It is generally assumed unless otherwise stated that when an artist works on music, they are working with producers and others. That and I find it to be vague as "several" could mean any number. I think just saying that "She created more than 100 songs" would be more concise and would not lose any information.
 * Is the day that Jepsen announced the album, (August 1, 2022), relevant for any reason? I believe that all the reader would need to know is when the album was released and that there were two other singles put out before its release.
 * I believe it helps put a timeline to when the album's production had definitely been completed and the tracklist chosen.
 * I am not fully convinced, but I do understand your point. It is not a major point for me so I would be okay with it staying in the article and it would not hold up my review in any way. Aoba47 (talk) 14:23, 5 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Was there any further coverage on the music video or on the performances during the tour?
 * The music video does not have any coverage, considering there really isn't much going on in it. And the tour has shockingly received no reviews from reliable sources I could find.
 * That makes sense. That was the vibe that I got while reading the article, but I just wanted to confirm that with you. Thank you for the response. Aoba47 (talk) 14:21, 5 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Would an audio sample fit in the "Composition and lyrics" section or would there be concerns that it would potentially overwhelm the section (or any other concerns in general about one)? I was only asking as I could see a strong justification for one illustrating the 1980s vibes that are being discussed here.
 * I would link engineered, mastered, mixed, and programmed to help with readers unfamiliar with that level of music jargon. I would link them in the prose and in the section with the credits.
 * For this part, (and influences of the 1980s), I would instead say (and influences from the 1980s music) to clarify where the link goes.
 * In the "Composition and lyrics" section, there are two sentences in a row that use "According to X critic". One of these instances should be revised to avoid repetition.
 * I was confused by this part, (the song does not specify if it was a serious relationship, friends-with-benefits, or just a crush). The article has consistently referred to the subject of this song as an "ex-lover" and that to me implies more than a crush.
 * This is a very good observation. There is a general critical consensus the song is about an ex so I have made this an attributed opinion.
 * Thank you for addressing this. I think attribution was the best way to go. Aoba47 (talk) 14:22, 5 July 2024 (UTC)


 * I tried to look for any other citations for this song. This source from Attitude says that she performed this song at Glastonbury Festival 2023. I am not sure if the source is appropriate for a FA so I would leave that up to you, and the citation does not go into much detail other than she performed it. Other than that (and again, I'd trust your judgement about it), it appears that you have covered everything else.

I hope that these comments are helpful. Once everything has been addressed, I will read through the article a few more times to make sure that I have not missed anything. Best of luck with this FAC, and I hope you are doing well. Aoba47 (talk) 22:35, 4 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the comments so far, NØ 02:39, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you for addressing everything. Great work with the article as always. I am always happy to see a song article up for a FAC. I support this FAC for promotion. Aoba47 (talk) 14:26, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for your support!--NØ</b> 18:16, 7 July 2024 (UTC)

Image review (pass)

 * Image is appropriately licensed in Commons, has alt text and its use is relevant in the article. Pseud 14 (talk) 00:18, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot for the review, <b style="color:purple">N</b><b style="color:teal">Ø</b> 02:39, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Adding that File:Carly Rae Jepsen - Talking to Yourself.ogg meets WP:SAMPLE and has appropriate FUR for its use. Pseud 14 (talk) 17:22, 7 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you for assessing the sample as well. I was going to ask about this.--<b style="color:purple">N</b><b style="color:teal">Ø</b> 18:16, 7 July 2024 (UTC)

Pseud 14

 * and commented on the lyrics -- perhaps a specific consensus of what reviewers thought of the lyrics overall
 * That would make a great addition but unfortunately the critical comments on the lyrics do not have any overlap to summarize.
 * That’s understandable and not a major issue. Pseud 14 (talk) 20:09, 7 July 2024 (UTC)


 * An accompanying music video for "Talking to Yourself" was released alongside it. -- I think this will work as "The music video for "Talking to Yourself" was released alongside it"
 * and performed it at Glastonbury Festival 2023 -- at the Glastonbury Festival 2023.
 * Chris DeVille of Stereogum thought it recalled the 1980s pastiche of Jepsen's albums Emotion (2015) and Dedicated (2019) -- does the reviewer mean the song drew parallels or is reminiscent of her previous albums 1980s theme? Maybe some wording change to "recalled"
 * That's all I have to add. Great read and its surprisingly nice to see you work on Jepsen. Pseud 14 (talk) 17:22, 7 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks for doing a prose review as well, Pseud 14! I do not know if I will be working on any other Jepsen articles, but this song was an immediate standout to me. I have fixed the issues along with some copyedits.--<b style="color:purple">N</b><b style="color:teal">Ø</b> 18:16, 7 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Support. Pseud 14 (talk) 20:09, 7 July 2024 (UTC)

Comments

 * "praised its production as catchy and commented on the lyrics" - "commented on" is a bit vague and doesn't really convey whether the comments were positive or negative. Possible to reword to give a tiny bit more detail?
 * "lockdowns following the COVID-19 pandemic" => "lockdowns during the COVID-19 pandemic"
 * "unable to join her family" => "being unable to join her family"
 * The openings of the three paragraphs under "Composition and lyrics" are all very similar - any way to reword?
 * "PopMatters's Jeffrey Davies" - while not technically wrong, this looks a bit odd with the "s's" and the second s not being italic. Maybe "Jeffrey Davies of PopMatters".......?
 * "described it as a sanguine track and "dance-pop anthem"" => "described it as a sanguine track and a "dance-pop anthem""
 * "and honed it among Jepsen's most high-energy songs" - I don't think "honed" is the right word here at all. Maybe "named"?
 * "using some diverting production brandishes" - "brandish" isn't a noun, so this doesn't work. I think maybe you mean "using some diverting production flourishes" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:16, 11 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Should be all done now, ChrisTheDude. Thanks a lot for reviewing this!--<b style="color:purple">N</b><b style="color:teal">Ø</b> 11:42, 12 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:12, 12 July 2024 (UTC)