Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/The Girl (2012 HBO film)/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by User:GrahamColm 10:02, 5 July 2013 (UTC).

The Girl (2012 HBO film)

 * Nominator(s): Paul MacDermott (talk) 14:25, 22 May 2013 (UTC)

I present a rather interesting article about an Alfred Hitchcock biopic which tells the story of his working relationship with the actress Tippi Hedren, and caused some controversy upon its release because of its negative portrayal of the film director. I'm nominating it for featured article because I've invested a lot of time in it and believe it's fairly close to FA standard. It covers the topic broadly, and in a neutral tone. It is also fairly stable. It went through GA in January, and has received an extensive copyedit courtesy of Baffle gab1978, who is an accomplished copyeditor. July 2014 will see the 50th anniversary of the release of Marnie, the second of Hitchcock's collaborations with Hedren, and regarded by some as the last of his great works, so it would be great to see this on the front page to coincide with that. Enjoy. Paul MacDermott (talk) 14:25, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Please note that because I edit with the use of assistive technology there may be some issues I will have difficulty addressing. See my disclaimer for further details. Thanks, Paul MacDermott (talk) 14:31, 22 May 2013 (UTC)

I did the GA review of this article in January, and I see it's been expanded quite nicely since then. I've done a little copyediting, and these are a few issues I've found on a first pass: —Bruce1eetalk 10:40, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Comments by Bruce1ee
 * Prose
 * In the last sentence of the first paragraph in the lead, Hedren is mentioned for the first time without saying who she is. Perhaps it would be better to change the second sentence in this paragraph to: "The Girl stars Sienna Miller as Tippi Hedren and Toby Jones as Alfred Hitchcock, ...". The subsequent linking of Hedren and Hitchcock will then have to be removed.
 * Done.
 * The "Controversy" and "Criticism and reaction" sections seems to be covering the same topic. Is there a reason it has been split in two, or am I missing something?
 * Controversy primarily focuses on Hedren's claims about Hitchcock's alleged behaviour, whereas Criticism is more centred on reaction to the film itself, but I see your point. Merging them would create an unwieldy section. Any thoughts on what to do here?
 * Thanks, I see the distinction now; I think it's ok as it is. —Bruce1eetalk 11:59, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Images
 * File:The-girl.jpg: please add "|image has rationale=yes" to Non-free poster. The FUR is present.
 * Done, I think, but please check.
 * None of the images have any alt text. I don't see this as been a requirement at WP:FA Criteria, but the toolbox near the top of WP:FAC has a tool to check for this.
 * Done.

Comment: quotes longer than 40 words should be blockquoted, and in general it seems like there are quite a few long quotes - almost a full 35% of the readable prose. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:17, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
 * I'll take another look at this and see whether I can chop some of them down a bit. If it is a major problem then I'll run it through the copy edit mill again. Let me know what you think. Paul MacDermott (talk) 22:51, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
 * ok, done some trimming. Chopped out some of the superfluous parts of the quotes and converted some to prose. There shouldn't be any that exceed 40 words now, but let me know if there are and I'll take another look. To enable quick access to them please be as specific as possible. Thanks Paul MacDermott (talk) 12:22, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

Graham Colm (talk) 19:28, 4 July 2013 (UTC)
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