Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Tunnel Vision (song)/archive2


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 05:22, 14 February 2015 (UTC).

Tunnel Vision (song)

 * Nominator(s): — Tomíca (T2ME) 21:54, 19 January 2015 (UTC)

This article is about... a song by American singer Justin Timberlake. Although the song didn't receive a huge commercial impact, its iconic music video sparked controversy after its release. I believe the article satisfies the criteria as its well-written (many thanks to for the copy-edit from the last FAC), well sourced and referenced. — Tomíca (T2ME) 21:54, 19 January 2015 (UTC)

Comments by Retrohead

 * "peaked at number 40 on the US Billboard Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart, and peaked at number eight on the UK R&B Singles Chart"–I think the second "peaked at" could be omitted without losing the meaning of the sentence.
 * Copy-edited it. — Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)
 * premiering on July 3 on Timberlake's Vevo channel–"and premiered" sound more grammatically correct than "premiering" because the premiere is finished action.
 * Done. — Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)
 * The opinions of Kia Macarechi and Justin Myers would read better if separated by semicolon instead of "and".
 * Done. — Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)


 * What kind of website is Vulture.com? It's the first time I've noticed it.
 * Vulture is a blog website part of New York magazine. — Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)


 * I'm little worried about the second sentence of the 'Composition and lyrical interpretation'. It seems to mix facts with opinions, or present opinions as facts ("vacuous" synthesizer or syncopated backbone).
 * There are just opinions now :). — Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)


 * Also, can you re-title the section 'Composition and lyrics'? Seems easier to understand and keeps its meaning.
 * Done.— Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)


 * "number 27 and sold 6,670 digital copies"–how about "selling 6,670 digital copies" or "with 6,670 digital copies sold"
 * Done. — Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)


 * Regarding the live performance, do we know when the song debuted live?
 * } Done too. I hope you are satisfied with the other responses too. — Tomíca (T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)
 * Ok, appreciate the swift response. Good luck with the other comments.--Retrohead (talk) 21:55, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Closing comment -- with no commentary for a couple of weeks I'm afraid this nom has stalled so I'll be archiving it shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:20, 14 February 2015 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 05:22, 14 February 2015 (UTC)
 * The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.