Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Xtort/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by 10:01, 13 May 2013 (UTC).

Xtort

 * Nominator(s): —Torchiest talkedits 04:27, 5 April 2013 (UTC)

Xtort was my first good article, and it's been exactly three years now since it was promoted. Since then, I've increased its size by 50% and polished it up significantly. The article subject is band KMFDM's top-selling and best-charting album ever, and I think it deserves the deluxe treatment. —Torchiest talkedits 04:27, 5 April 2013 (UTC)

Delegate's comment - I'm sorry that this candidate has not received any comments and I will be archiving it presently. The prose needs to be improved. In the the Lead, which is not engaging, try to avoid "it was" "it was". The second sentence is too long. Try to remove redundancy such as "as well" and "also" and pompous words like "stated" when simple words like "said" would suffice. There are odd expressions like "coming off" and phrases that are hard to understand like "creating a press release that both insulted and hyped the coming set". Graham Colm (talk) 22:16, 12 May 2013 (UTC)

Graham Colm (talk) 22:16, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
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