Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Yao Ming


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 18:14, 29 April 2008.

Yao Ming
(here goes) I'm nominating this article for featured article because it's recently passed GA (actually, very recently, hehe), and I think it is good enough in terms of comprehensiveness, verability, etc. to fulfill the criteria. Noble Story (talk) 13:38, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * What makes the following a reliable source?
 * http://www.nbadraft.net/profiles/yaoming.htm
 * It's one of the major NBA draft sites, and it's reliable.
 * Please establish its reliability in terms of policy, WP:V, WP:SPS or WP:SELFPUB. The only thing I can find on its website is this page, which gives us nothing to go on except that its owned by something called Sports Phenoms.    Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:15, 29 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I am unconvinced that this is a reliable source, but it's only used once, and doesn't seem to be used controversially. Please try to replace this source with a better one.  Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:23, 29 April 2008 (UTC)
 * http://mediatakeout.com/Exclusives/Nia_Yao.html
 * It's a link of the hoax.


 * All other links checked out. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:21, 17 April 2008 (UTC)


 * I'd appreciate feedback on my first pass through for language and WP style. - Dan (talk) 15:27, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Seems OK to me. Noble Story (talk) 15:42, 17 April 2008 (UTC)


 * (copied at article talk page) this is the diff for my copyediting on your FAC (and there are a few other edits mixed in there). I could be wrong about anything.  Feel free to revert.  Feel free to ask.  I am happy to look things up and provide support for my edits, or try to. - Dan Dank55 (talk) 01:20, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Initial comments
 * The lead doesn't really emphasize Yao's status as a major cultural figure in China. His importance goes beyond basketball, with all of his sponsorships and the like.
 * Some of the language is repetitive. For example, the phrase "at the same age" appears twice in the first paragraph of "Early life and CBA career".
 * The description of the Charles Barkley-Kenny Smith bet is misleading. Barkley actually kissed a donkey ("Kenny's ass", in a different sense).
 * Would it be possible to say something about Yao's transition to American culture? I remember it being a big deal when he received his driver's license.
 * I'll try to pitch in with some general copyediting over the weekend.

Zagalejo^^^ 05:46, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I've reworded the "at the same age" part, and I've expanded the lead. I've also clarified the part about Barkley's bet (hopefully without going to off-topic). However, as for talking about his transition...I would think that it would obvious that he had to make adjustments. And I don't really know if all of the details would be notable ("Yao missed Chinese food", "Yao looked happier getting his driver's license than he did beating the Lakers", etc.). Noble Story (talk) 06:29, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead looks better. I still think the Smith/Barkley bet could be clarified further; I'll try fiddling around with that part later. Regarding the transition to American culture, I think we should at least say a little more about Colin Pine, since he played a pretty significant role during Yao's rookie year. Zagalejo^^^ 07:06, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I've added a part about Colin Pine. However, I don't know about the Barkley part. As I said before, it would be hard to fully tell the story without getting off-topic.Noble Story (talk) 13:49, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I think the article would be clearer (and more fun to read) if we just quote Barkley's initial promise. Everything hinges on the fact that Barkley explicitly said "ass", and not "behind", "butt", etc. I'll try to dig up a good source for that quote. Zagalejo^^^ 16:30, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Chensiyuan
 * 1) "Yao finished with 10 points and 10 rebounds; O'Neal scored 31 points and 13 rebounds." - won't hurt with a boxscore ref; since we're dealing with statistics, we should ensure verifiability.
 * Added ref.
 * 1) "In the summer of 2004, the Rockets acquired Tracy McGrady from the Orlando Magic in a seven-player trade that also sent Steve Francis and Cuttino Mobley to Orlando." - perhaps (and strictly perhaps) Yao's reception to the trade is worth mentioning. Did he for example think that the Rockets would become serious contenders? I'm not referring of course to the general sentiments of feeling excited whenever there's a trade lol.
 * Added trade response.
 * Just out of curiosity, could I see those two quotes in their entirety (IE, the full sentences)? Zagalejo^^^ 04:46, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * The full paragraph containing the two quotes (from Yao: A Life in Two Worlds) is as follows: "I will miss them," Yao said later. "All three helped me in every way my first two seasons. Stevie, as team leader, looked out for me like a brother and I will always think of them all as friends. But I also know now this is a business and anyone can be traded. Maybe I will be traded one day, too. For now, all I can say is I'm excited about playing with Tracy McGrady. He can do some amazing things and I'm looking forward to seeing him do them every day with me, instead of a couple of times a year against me."


 * 1) I'm all for using images, but since this article doesn't suffer from a lack of quality (and legal) images, I think the image with the caption "Yao answers questions from reporters" doesn't really add anything to the article. It's just a closeup of his face, but his face is already quite clearly seen in some of the other pics. Just a view. Chensiyuan (talk) 06:41, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, I wanted to capture the sense of his being surrounded by reporters (note the mics arounds him). But if you feel it is extraneous, please remove it. Noble Story (talk) 06:49, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments Nice article. Here are a few suggestions:
 * Would like to see a section on how he plays basketball, with some views on his strengths (size, shooting touch, rebounding) and weaknesses (slow, some call him "soft"). See Tim Duncan for an example. If you decide to make this section, make sure it's sourced well, like the rest of the article.
 * I've thought long and hard about it, but I think in the end it is too hard to keep it NOPV. Even if you link to different articles, 99% of the time it will only be someone's so-called "expert" opinion.


 * Why is there a fan club in External links? This should be removed.
 * In this case, the fan club is not an independent operation, it is actually connected to Yao, asin he posts messages there (occasionally), and so on.


 * Sentence suggestion: "The Rockets made the playoffs for the first time in Yao's career, as they claimed the seventh seed in the Western Conference. Although, eventually, the NBA finalist Los Angeles Lakers eliminated Houston in the first round, with the Rockets winning only one game." Try "The Rockets made the playoffs for the first time in Yao's career, claiming the seventh seed in the Western Conference. In the first round, however, the Los Angeles Lakers eliminated Houston in five games".
 * I've reworded it accordingly.


 * If the Rockets' winning streak before Yao's injury this year is mentioned, it should also be stated that they won the next 10 games without him. It comes off like he was the primary reason for the streak, when in reality the whole team was playing well. Something about the statement just rubs me the wrong way. Giants2008 (talk) 23:40, 19 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I've attempted to reword it better. Noble Story (talk) 10:17, 20 April 2008 (UTC)

Support - a very good and well-sourced article, I think that an improvement could be to cite the statements in the lead paragraph as well as within all the rest of the article. --Andrewlp1991 (talk) 04:55, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Do you have any specific statements. Most of the statements in the lead are pretty general, and are already referenced in the main body. Noble Story (talk) 10:22, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * In a lot of the FA's I've seen there are footnotes everywhere in the article - including the lead. I think I'll try adding refs to the lead myself - it's good for more casual readers who don't have much time to dig into the main sections. Plus, verification is easier. --Andrewlp1991 (talk) 03:04, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, I don't think there are problems with verifiability -- all statements are referenced in the main body, as I said, except for the one about his height, which I referenced. And again, the statements are mostly general, and don't make any specific, could-be-controversial claims. Noble Story (talk) 14:48, 25 April 2008 (UTC)

Support - as good as Tim Duncan, even with less background info. igordebraga ≠ 20:52, 20 April 2008 (UTC)

Support - Overall a fine article. Just do me a quick favor. In the lead: "However, the Rockets have not advanced past the first round of the playoffs since he has joined the team,". Remove "has". Other than that, very good work. Giants2008 (talk) 14:36, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * object - why is there no section on his playing style, attributes and technique. #2, IIRC, his parents were advised by the communist govt to get together to increase the % of giving birth to child that was inclined towards basketball.  Blnguyen  ( bananabucket ) 04:06, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Stats also need consistency. All the averages should be given to the same decimal place. If it is 22.0 then put 22.0 not 22.  Blnguyen  ( bananabucket ) 04:08, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I've addressed the parts about his profile above. The allegations about "his parents were advised by the communist govt to get together to increase the % of giving birth to child that was inclined towards basketball" was speculation, nothing more. And exactly where are you referring to when you talk about stat consistency? Noble Story (talk) 04:14, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * You sure it was just speculation? I remember seeing that presented as a fact in a Sports Illustrated article a few years ago. Zagalejo^^^ 23:34, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
 * OK, I've added a sentence about it. Noble Story (talk) 12:13, 29 April 2008 (UTC)
 * In his 2008 season, where points and blocks are not given as averages. There is another occurance in his first playoff series versus the Lakers. In 2006 World Championships, nine is spelled out, unlike the rest of the article. Giants2008 (talk) 14:46, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * OK, I've corrected that. Noble Story (talk) 00:43, 23 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support Looks very good. I noticed this on the GAN list, and since then it's continued to improve. My only suggestion would be to remove his birthplace at the start per WP:DATE. Peanut4 (talk) 01:16, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Done. Noble Story (talk) 01:23, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments. The article seems to be pretty comprehensive. I think the prose is okay but could be improved. Here are some suggestions of what to look for in the prose: Karanacs (talk) 14:07, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Watch for repetitive word choice "Yao was initially pressured...Li also pressured Yao...."; "contract entitled Evergreen to 33% of Yao's earnings,[4] but the contract", etc
 * Done.
 * There aren't good transitions between thoughts in some paragraphs. For example the 2005-2008 section spends several sentences discussing an injury that led to him missing 21 games and then, without saying anything about his performance or when he came back, it starts talking about him making the All-Star game again.
 * Done.
 * Check to make sure that all of your clauses make sense together. This sentence, for example, implies that the Rockets didn't win many games because Yao and McGrady did not play together "Yao and McGrady played only 31 games together,[55] and the Rockets did not make the playoffs, winning only 34 games"  (if that is someone's speculation it should be reworded better)
 * Is it speculation? If a team loses its two best players for an extended period of time (two thirds of the season), then it pretty obvious they will do worse.
 * Watch for wordiness. Cleaner, tighter prose generally sounds better)
 * Done (I think).
 * Shouldn't refer to him as "Yao Ming" in the body of the article after the first reference (unless its in a quote). Some places in the article are mixed between "Yao" and "Yao Ming"
 * Done. Noble Story (talk) 14:59, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Support language and style. I'm not qualified to support other aspects. I just did a few minor edits to tighten it up; I'm quite happy with it now. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 01:35, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
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