Wikipedia:Featured article review/Chuck Palahniuk/archive1

Review commentary

 * Messages left at User:LGagnon and Bio

This article is very good overall, however, two sections Writing style and Fandom completely lack references and are possibly OR. I hope this FAR process will facilitate the correction of these problems, I'd be very reticent for us to FARC it. Mi kk er (...) 00:10, 13 October 2006 (UTC)


 * The writing style section is based on a series of essays Palahniuk wrote that are supposed to go into his non-fiction writing book. These were on his website, but are not accessible to non-subscribers anymore. The fandom info can also be found on his website, as well as some interviews. -- LGagnon 01:45, 13 October 2006 (UTC)
 * Then reinsert them with the note that there's a subscription required.--Rmky87 23:01, 17 October 2006 (UTC)


 * Heck, he's an author, so let's do him the courtesy of writing the article in excellent prose. Here are examples of problems. Don't just fix these points, though.
 * "and grew up living in a mobile home"—Spot the redundant word.
 * "His parents later separated and divorced, often leaving him and his three siblings to live with their grandparents ..."—"Often" is odd there.
 * "In his twenties, Palahniuk attended the University of Oregon's School of Journalism, graduating in 1986." No, "and graduated in".
 * "While attending college, he worked as an intern for National Public Radio's KLCC in Eugene, Oregon. He moved to Portland soon afterwards. After writing for the local newspaper for a short while, he began working for ...". OK, two of the three sentences start with a time-phrase. Why not be consistent? "For a short while" does not belong in an encyclopedic register (vague).
 * "had a short stint"—No.
 * A few idle "also" need to be weeded out.

Not good enough. Tony 09:46, 23 October 2006 (UTC)

I'm surprised this is still an FA. No FA should have an template anywhere in it, no matter how long ago it was promoted. Plus, as noted above, two sections are deficient and I would also add that the intro is too cursory. Either remove or rewrite to current standards. Daniel Case 20:47, 8 November 2006 (UTC)

FARC commentary

 * Suggested FA criteria concerns are referencing and prose. Joelito (talk) 20:47, 31 October 2006 (UTC)


 * Remove referencing concerns not addressed including the OR tag. Jay32183 20:08, 12 November 2006 (UTC)
 * Remove—This is all that has been done since my last comment on 23 Oct. Tony 12:25, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
 * Remove Insufficient inline cites (1. c. violatiob). LuciferMorgan 19:00, 13 November 2006 (UTC)