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George II of Great Britain

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Review commentary
These two immediately stand out:


 * Does not exemplify 'our best work' (1)
 * No inline citations (2c)

- FrancisTyers · 08:29, 26 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Remove . It needs greater depth and length, and inline citations. --Oldak Quill 10:04, 26 June 2006 (UTC)
 * This is not in the voting process yet. But good points. :) - 139.222.127.232 10:37, 26 June 2006 (UTC)
 * Ah well, It's changed since I last did this! :) --Oldak Quill 12:07, 26 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Fails Criterion 2a. Here are examples.
 * "George II exercised little control over policy during his early reign, the government instead being controlled by ..." After the comma, it's awkward.
 * " He was the second British monarch of the House of Hanover, and the last British monarch to personally lead his troops into battle (at Dettingen in 1743). He was also the last British monarch to have been born outside of Great Britain." In the second sentence, pick the two redundant words.
 * "The Act of Settlement 1701 devised the British Crown to the Hereditary Prince's grandmother Sophia of Hanover if the then-ruling monarch, William III, and his sister-in-law, the Princess Anne of Denmark, both died without issue." "Devised"? "Without issue"?
 * "shortly after the demise of the Electress Sophia (d. 8 June 1714)"—that's a ridiculous euphemism for "death".

Please copy-edit the whole article thoroughly. Tony 03:12, 4 July 2006 (UTC)

FARC commentary

 * Main FA criteria concerns are not Wikipedia's best work (1) and citations (2c). Marskell 16:21, 14 July 2006 (UTC)


 * Talk message left at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Biography. Sandy 22:34, 16 July 2006 (UTC)


 * Remove Here is the compare since the article was nominated June 26. Negligible activity, no improvement to references or prose. Sandy 18:10, 23 July 2006 (UTC)
 * Remove as per Sandy and my previous comments. Tony 13:33, 25 July 2006 (UTC)