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H.D.

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I am nominating this featured article for review because there is some uncited text and after having tried to source some of it and read a bit about the subject I found there is some rather important info either missing or uncited.Paradise Chronicle (talk) 07:59, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
 * I see what you mean. Some problems are quick to fix, like the external links in the bibliography, which can become footnotes instead. I do think the article is rescuable, though it would be easier if there was a really good, recent biography to rely on for filling gaps. I would have liked to find something from 2000 or later, but even the HD society doesn't point to one. The best sources might be:
 * this 1995 bio
 * from 2011, the MLA Approaches to Teaching H.D.’s Poetry and Prose might have some very useful overviews
 * Susan Friedman’s article in the Dictionary of Literary Biography, vol. 45, 2nd series (volume is entitled, Modern American Poets) - HD society calls it "excellent and highly recommended"
 * Herself Defined: the Poet H.D. and Her World, by Barbara Guest, an "authorized biography" from the 80s that still seems to be in use
 * Before I did my source search, I was more alarmed by the fact that the sources in the article are a little old. But now that I have looked for something newer, I am a little less worried that they are out of date. Or, if they are, there isn't an obvious better source. I am pretty busy this week but may see if I can find some of these sources and start poking. ~ L 🌸  (talk) 16:58, 29 March 2022 (UTC)

Its a fair nom of an old FAR save and does need to be brought up to standard. The recent FAR driven overhaul of the closely related Imagism will help as is recent, so have the (the near identical) sources close to hand and they are fresh in mind. This one is a lost closer to my heart than say Heavy Metal (although as listening to Sunn O))) now), so slotting highly on priority list. Assessment and estimated timeline to follow. Ceoil (talk) 23:51, 31 March 2022 (UTC)


 * I have gone through some other poetry FAs and seen some have an own article on works or bibliography like Stephen Crane or Maya Angelou. Other FAs also have a selection of works included in the article on the author. I'd personally prefer an own article for her bibliography, but I am not so much into the subject. Or maybe her works could be presented more in detail as in some of the other FAs. What is your opinion on the matter Ceoil? - Paradise Chronicle
 * Usually would go for a separate article, but think here the section (now retitled "selected works" so we don't have to be exhaustive and converted to two columns so it doesn't take up too much space), we have is concise and manageable. Not opposed to spinning out however. Ceoil (talk) 19:41, 9 April 2022 (UTC)

As an update, am traveling for another week or so, so do not have access to my book sources. Also have ordered which looks promising for expansion. Ceoil (talk) 20:04, 9 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Having seen your effort in ordering a book on her, I also made some online research and intend to work on the article a bit while you are away for the next week or so.Paradise Chronicle (talk) 00:12, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Am really delighted to hear that :) Ceoil (talk) 01:55, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Alright, I am getting into it. On her relationship with Bryher there seemed to be quite much written and Norman Holmes Pearson, the holder of her copyrights is not mentioned yet in the article. They seemed to have had an extensive, decades-long professional relationship, with him publishing her works also after her death. H.D.'s daughter Perdita seemed to be working with him during WW 2 in the secret service.Paradise Chronicle (talk) 19:32, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

As an update, my copy arrived yesterday, but am still at the reading through stage. Ceoil (talk) 13:01, 23 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Could we get an update on status here? Nikkimaria (talk) 02:44, 14 May 2022 (UTC)
 * I am updating the article with info I find. I don't so much take care on prominent sources (because I don't find them on the subject) but on info I see as notable. But like this it might not be a FA. I hope for Coeil to maybe find some ways to keep it an FA. A personal life section might be good? Or a section where the shifting relationships are better described? As to me that H.D. and Bryher kept being a couple while changing husband and lover is north a section. Paradise Chronicle (talk) 16:46, 16 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Ceoil, Paradise Chronicle, how are things looking? Nikkimaria (talk) 18:19, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Well, I have added some citation needed templates to unsourced phrases but I am sincerely not so much interested in keeping this an FA. The sources within the article are often rather good looking, though and if someone was interested enough, I assume they'd find the sources matching the phrases. (talk) 19:58, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm still interested, and will repost here shortly. Ceoil (talk) 20:12, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Paradise Chronicle's tags and additions have been most helpful. needs more work but I think doable if a time allowance is given. Will work away and update again here in a week. Paradise, your help would be much appreciated; imo the legacy sections is most lacking. Ceoil (talk) 12:18, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Ceoil? Nikkimaria (talk) 03:20, 25 June 2022 (UTC)
 * most of the citation issues are fixed, now expanding the text. Will update again over the end of next weekend, when I will feel ready to face the FAR nominator.Ceoil (talk) 21:12, 25 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Nikkimaria, Paradise Chronicle; am now ready to take feedback. Ceoil (talk) 18:18, 26 June 2022 (UTC)
 * The article is in a far better shape than before, my main concerns were addressed, no more uncited phrases in the article. Thank you Ceoil also for the additional images. Paradise Chronicle (talk) 22:12, 27 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I can probably read through it over the next week if it needs another set of eyes. Hog Farm Talk 13:33, 28 June 2022 (UTC)
 * It's on my list, too, but things here are slow going due to IRL stuff. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  13:39, 28 June 2022 (UTC)

Stopped there, do not understand what is happening here, but unless much more work is planned, it looks like we should be moving to FARC. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  02:31, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * How are these two thoughts -- in the same sentence -- related? She met Pound in 1901, and attended Bryn Mawr College between 1904 and 1906.
 * Split up. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I thought innovate was a verb?? championed her as an innovate poet.
 * Reworded. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Why "already" ... no prior context for this ... By this time Pound had already relocated to England,
 * Tweaked. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * ???? In 1896, hes was appointed Flower Professor of Astronomy
 * I can't explain this, copy or paste or something . "Hes" and "flower" removed. Ceoil (talk) 19:46, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * That was added by me, but I made a typo on the hes which meant to be a his. Her father was really the Flower Professor of Astronomy in memory of a Mister Flower.Paradise Chronicle (talk) 18:59, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * ???? After she studied at home until 1910.
 * Reworded, but intended was "After, she studied...". Doh. Ceoil (talk) 19:46, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't understand the section heading "H.D. Imagiste" ... we shouldn't repeat the article title in a section heading, and why not just, Imagist?
 * It's not nonsensical, and the couple sources I'm skimming do focus on Pound's "H.D. Imagiste" inscription on her poem mentioned in the section. She also places some importance on that moment. Still, Imagism might be a more descriptive heading. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "H.D. Imagiste" is a thing...amongst aficionados; but we are not writing for them. Sect is retitled as "Imagism", but may become "London and Imagism". Ceoil (talk) 19:56, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * ???? He was impressed by her awareness of the aspiration's for contemporary poetry and free verse which had been discussing with Aldington, with whom he had shared plans to reform through tanka and the brevity of haiku. ????
 * Completely re-written as "...(Pound had) already begun to meet with other poets at the Eiffel Tower restaurant in Soho to discuss plans to reform contemporary poetry through free verse, the brevity of the tanka and haiku forms, and the removal of all unnecessary verbiage from poetry." Ceoil (talk) 19:46, 8 July 2022 (UTC)


 * does this article interest you? Sandy Georgia (Talk)  02:55, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * It sure does! How can I help? Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:59, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * See my post just above ... I started at the top and found all sorts of problems. Thanks for helping! Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  03:49, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I fixed a few (hopefully). In general, I think the copy-editing/clarity issues alone are significant. The citations themselves need some fixing up. I'll dig into it. I have no informed opinion on whether fixes can happen during FAR or if a move to FARC is needed. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * With you, Ceoil and Victoriaearle on it (3x competence), theoretically a move to FARC should be avoidable. Thanks again for helping out, Sandy Georgia (Talk)  04:43, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * To update, Firefangledfeathers and Victoria have done a lot of heavy lifting re prose, and I'm combing through. Will ping again when ready, and thanks so much for the review. Ceoil (talk) 19:49, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I've been working from the bottom up and very slowly (well, that's an understatement!). I am familiar with H. D's story - at least the early years, but came to it via the sources to do with Pound and it's better to get her out from his shadow where she's lingered (as Ceoil has suggested), so there's more reading involved. The article makes sense to me, so maybe it's just an issue of rewording? Will continue to watch to see how it develops. P.s I don't see this in FARC territory at all. Victoria (tk) 13:07, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Ah, so now I understand why I found so many problems at the top! Thx, Victoria ... Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  15:28, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Looks like it's under control and others are working the page so I'll go ahead and step away now. Victoria (tk) 18:49, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Deservedly after so much tinkering, fixing and smoothing. Your edits were significant improvements. Ceoil (talk) 19:53, 8 July 2022 (UTC)

I can't decipher the problem here, left an inline comment: What's odd is that it links to the correct ISBN on Amazon, so what is the error? Sandy Georgia (Talk)  20:03, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Aldington, Richard; Gates, Norman. Richard Aldington: An Autobiography in Letters. Pennsylvania State University Press, 1992. ISBN ‎978-0-2710-0832-5 Parameter error in ISBN : Invalid ISBN.
 * Same prob with the (different isbn) on amazon.co.uk. I let it in assuming it was a local to wiki bug (these things happen, as we are seeing with the duplinks tool. Ceoil (talk) 20:06, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The template documentation for the isbn template says "Since invalid ISBNs are sometimes used in publications, it is possible to disable the validity check for individual ISBNs given as parameters. In order to do so, add invalid?=yes (with ? replaced by the parameter number 1 to 9) to the template. In this case, the article will be added to Category:Pages with listed invalid ISBNs." so this ain't necessarily a problem and there appears to be a work-around to kill the error message. Hog Farm Talk 20:11, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes, I suspect it's a Wiki bug ... but can we sort the editor/author issue I left in the inline comment ? Sandy Georgia (Talk)  20:11, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I'll look into it after work if nobody else addresses it first - I have an idea what's going on but it may not be right (it could be a collection of writings by Aldington edited by Gates). Hog Farm Talk 20:15, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The error suppression worked: Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  20:15, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Great. One to remember as has happened before. The sources is now listed as Gates only, as its his introduction that is being used as a source. Ceoil (talk) 20:20, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * But irritating is that it is still listed in an error category, that will cause it to show on FA error report ... so I added back the note ...  Sandy Georgia (Talk)  20:24, 8 July 2022 (UTC)

Which version of Levenson is being used ? The ISBN listed goes here (New Directions publisher, 1983, a different book), while the citation indicates Cambridge University Press, 1986, which has a different ISBN: Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  21:17, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Hmm. The quote its supporting appears in a lot of books; am going to try and remove Levenson and cite to another (in use) source. The list of sources is anyway getting too long, as not all are core. Ceoil (talk) 21:48, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Now reff'd to King (1981), a book that is specifically about H.D. and Pound rather than a gneral survey of Imagism (and correspondingly doesn't throw up an isbn error). Nice spot! Ceoil (talk) 22:01, 8 July 2022 (UTC)

To note, I imported text from Victoria and Sarah's work on Ezra Pound in this diff. I think I followed att, but mentioning here if further needs to be done as this is the place for confessions. Ceoil (talk) 10:54, 9 July 2022 (UTC)


 * 'Tis good ... you attributed in edit summary, per WP:CWW, so I don't have to go and add a to talk! Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  16:58, 9 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Could we get an update on status here? Nikkimaria (talk) 03:20, 30 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Two days of focus and will finished up. Thanks. Ceoil (talk) 04:29, 31 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Is there any chance I could imclude https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Annie_Winifred_Ellerman.webp Ceoil (talk) 04:43, 31 July 2022 (UTC)
 * the image expert. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  17:20, 31 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Because the image is non-free you'd need to be able to justify that its presence would significantly increase readers' understanding of the article topic, and its omission would be detrimental to that understanding. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:23, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't think so. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 01:45, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
 * lso, anoher week please and will finish up. Ceoil (talk) 12:00, 31 July 2022 (UTC)

 Notes that don't match Sources: Missing:
 * Blau 1981
 * Chisholm 1992
 * Duncan 2011
 * Evans 2010
 * Guest 1985
 * Harrell 2010
 * Hughes 1990
 * Morris 2003
 * Taylor 2001

Short note does not match Source listing:
 * Lohr Martz, (1983), p. 299

Years don't match
 * McCabe

Inconsistent format in short note:
 * Sword, Helen. (1995), pp. 347–62 (last name only ?)

I had to put these sources into a spreadhseet to check this; if the notes were converted to sfns, errors would be caught easily. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  02:17, 1 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Still on the docket. I'll need a bit of time after Ceoil's pass to work on that. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:19, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
 * But the errors will still have to be sorted ... McCabe is all over the place. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  02:20, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't disagree. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:25, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for the list. I've fixed a couple of mistakes: fixed the transcription mistake for McCabe (2022 > 2002); removed the first name from Martz & Sword. The following sources are currently not used, hence not showing up in footnotes: Once the lit review and reading is done they can be removed. I've not been doing any of the reading but there's a fair amount and don't want to presume at this point that a source will or will not be used. Ceoil can speak to that. Victoria (tk) 20:15, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Blau DuPlessis 1981
 * Chisholm 1992
 * Duncan 2011
 * Evans 2010
 * Guest is quoted in Kakutani (NYT), otherwise not used
 * Harrell 2010
 * Hughes 1990
 * Morris 2003
 * Taylor 2002
 * Thanks! Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  20:18, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

Thanks muchly Victoria. As an update
 * Chisholm 1992 replaced by Lucas 1993 (Lucas is a review of Chisholm's book), and incorporated
 * Duncan 2011, Harrell 2010, Morris 2003 & Taylor 2002 removed having re-read on jstor
 * Added from Hughes 1990 Ceoil (talk) 23:56, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Guest and Evans removed. DuPlessis 1981 incorporated. Ceoil (talk) 23:11, 13 August 2022 (UTC)

Update: I would very much like Firefangledfeathers to begin the conversion to snf if they are still interested and have time, and SandyGeorgia, Paradise Chronicle and Victoria to begin a final review when they have a chance. Thanks all (incl Nikkimaria for endless patience, eeek). Ceoil (talk) 23:14, 13 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Ceoil, I have to get through Joan of Arc; ping me after Firefangledfeathers is done if I forget to get here next. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  23:42, 13 August 2022 (UTC)
 * np Sandy, and youre help/view is appreciated as always. Ceoil (talk) 00:45, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the ping! I'll get started. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:18, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Happy days. Ceoil (talk) 03:09, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I have added some info on her daughter Perdita, who is described at the section Legacy. I usually add info on family and children in personal life, but in the case of H.D. I am not sure if that works as well. Paradise Chronicle (talk) 20:01, 14 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Ping received. Will take a run through when I can. Victoria (tk) 19:36, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * pls ping me when you're done so I won't get in your way ... Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:45, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't know when I can get to it and am happy to go last, after all the changes have been made, etc. If Ceoil is traveling it's possible I might be able to address points that raised during his absence. Victoria (tk) 19:57, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * P.s regarding the ref reformatting - I've not looked closely but noted that Barnstone is "Barnstone-Doolittle" in the short note. We're not citing Doolittle, we're citing Barnstone. It worked in the unformatted refs, but with templates we may need to split out Barnstone into the separate chapters, "Introduction", "Readers Notes", "Life" to get it right. Victoria (tk) 20:10, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * On the radar! Trilogy is not the only book affected by this. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 20:39, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Great. Sorry if it sounds as though I'm being picky. Victoria (tk) 23:44, 14 August 2022 (UTC)
 * No apology needed! I went with a style that works for me but am open to feedback. I'm now done (I hope) with converting the references and citations. I'm not sure who is up next exactly, so I'm pinging both and . Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:17, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

Also, an update on the unused sources. It's now just:. Laity seems like the main missed opportunity here. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:26, 23 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Victoria may be out for health reasons for the rest of the week; the remaining items, and those on talk, are probably best left for her return, although I'll start looking in as I get time. Great work so far !! Thanks for doing the tedious stuff. Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  04:27, 23 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I got sidetracked. But I've been watching and will try to get back to this in the next few days. I definitely need another read through and, if possible, address any of the issues on the talk page. It's possible we'll have to wait for Ceoil to surface. Victoria (tk) 19:05, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Please ping me to review after you're done (and depending on when Ceoil surfaces). Sandy Georgia (Talk)  13:06, 25 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Will try to get to it during the week. Victoria (tk) 21:25, 28 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Hello. Just for the record am resurfacing, and delighted with all the work since. Trying to catch up. Ceoil (talk) 22:51, 2 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I think this needs to be closed one way or another. For happy reasons, I'm probably not around for the next few weeks. However, think Firefangled and Victoria have done great work, the page is much better, weather it retains the star or not, the work was not in vain; we now have a vastly improved article - to acknowledge the heavy duty work by both. Ceoil (talk) 22:46, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I'll do a read-through then. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  22:50, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm free to work on any issues that come up in your read-through. Pseudo-Pseudo-Dionysius thinks they'll be back with is in about a week to overhaul the Selected works and maybe some other improvements. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 22:58, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Nikki is always very patience, but to be fair to her nerves.....22:52, 11 September 2022 (UTC)

I'll try to read through this over the weekend with an eye to seeing if this is ready to keep, although I have to admit that the only poetry I've read in the last year or so is the book of Psalms. Hog Farm Talk 22:36, 14 September 2022 (UTC)

Starting in since Hog Farm is busy. I'm stopping there, as this is more than I should have put on the main FAR page, and will resume later on the talk page with the World War I section. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:59, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Four HarvRef errors still present; you can install this script to view them (Evans, Laity, Lucas, and H.D. (1979). Pearson, Norman Holmes; King, Michael (eds.). Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:20, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Removed. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 20:49, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * A range of 60 pages to verify this text seems odd: "Japanese and Far East verse became early sources for the Imagists, and Doolittle often visited the print room at the British Museum with Aldington and the curator and poet Laurence Binyon to view Nishiki-e prints and other examples of traditional Japanese verse.[22]" Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:24, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * The source didn't support this well at all, and I removed it. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Why is Imagist uppercase here? (It's been a long time, but I feel like I already asked that question.) co-founded the avant-garde Imagist group of poets Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  19:30, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Anecdotally, most sources I've seen keep Imagist capitalized, and treat it like an adjectival or derivative-noun form of the apparently proper noun 'Imagism'. If you'd like me to be more rigorous about a source review looking at caps, I can do so. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:00, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * no need; just checking. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  02:03, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * This sentence hits me very weird in the lead. While it may be clarified as I get in to the body of the article, what makes it strange is that psychologists should not have friendships with their patients: "She befriended Sigmund Freud during the 1930s as a patient looking to understand both her war trauma and bisexuality." Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  19:33, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Hyphen on five-decade career? "During her five decade career," Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:34, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Hyphenated. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 20:49, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Family of five sons? The family had five sons and a daughter ... family with five sons? "Hilda was their only daughter in a family of five sons." Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  19:36, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed to 'with'. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 20:49, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Nervous breakdown is an undefined medical term. The freely available source says "health issues"; what does the other source say? "due to poor grades and a near nervous breakdown".  Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  19:41, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Removed. The sources all treat this differently, and the most common treatment is not to mention the breakdown at all. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:00, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Uncited ? "and by the time Pound left for Europe in 1908 the engagement had been called off." Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:42, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Silverstein mentions at least two engagements between 1905 and 1908. In the hopes of avoiding proseline, I mention the engagements but not the years. I also dropped Pound's travel. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:00, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * We have her in Europe in 1908, but suddenly back in Pennsylvania in 1910, with no transition in between? "and by the time Pound left for Europe in 1908 the engagement had been called off. In 1910, Doolitle started a relationship with Frances Josepha Gregg, a young female art student at the Pennsylvania Academy of the Fine Arts.[12]" Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:43, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * It was Pound in Europe, not Doolittle. Should be less confusing now that Pound's travel is out. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:00, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm lost. "On recommendation by Pound, she published her children's stories on astronomy in a syndicated Presbyterian newsletter, which are now lost;" On Pound's recommendation?  At Pound's urging? the newsletter is now lost, or the stories are now lost? Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  19:45, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "Pound" dropped (sources mention Pound's father being part of the newspaper connection, but it's not important), and the whole bit rewritten. Bryer and Roblyer had trouble finding much of the pre-1913 work, but they don't go as far as "lost", and this was back in 1969. I removed "lost" for now; maybe Pseudo-Pseudo-Dionysius can weigh on this, but I don't want to ping them until I know their thesis is done!
 * Can the part after the semi-colon not be worked in earlier, with the now lost a separate and more clear separate sentence? "On recommendation by Pound, she published her children's stories on astronomy in a syndicated Presbyterian newsletter, which are now lost;[4][14] she had these and others published before 1913 mostly under the name Edith Gray.[15]" Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:46, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Handled, I think, by my trim and rewrite. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * That confused me because I suddenly thought they were in New York; can the city be added? "Pound had already begun to meet with other poets at the Eiffel Tower restaurant in Soho to discuss ideas for reforming contemporary poetry," Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:49, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * , could you give this a re-read now that the end of §Early life has been rewritten? To me, it seems clear that all of this section takes place in London. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm going to re-start from the top, on talk ... I found the top quite confusing, obviously :) Sandy Georgia (Talk)  14:27, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't know what this means; a metronome is an apparatus that sets a tempo, don't know what this is saying; "compose poetry in the sequence of the musical phrase, not in the sequence of metronome." Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:53, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * This was a slightly-off, unclearly marked direct quote. I've turned it into a block quote and fixed the wording. It wouldn't surprise me if readers are still confused, but at least they'll know it's the Imagists' fault and not Wikipedia's. I think they're just expressing an embrace of free verse and a rejection of iambic pentameter and the like. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * How are these two thoughts related ??? "to view Nishiki-e prints and other examples of traditional Japanese verse.[22] During a 1912 conversation with Pound, she told him that she found her full name old fashioned and "quaint";" Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:54, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I removed the Nishiki-e stuff. "During a 1912 ..." starts a new paragraph now. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Yikes, can this be somehow broken up (I ran out of breath reading it), and the way dates are handled is inconsistent within the sentence. "She worked on the plays by Euripides, publishing in 1916 a translation of choruses from Iphigeneia at Aulis, in 1919 a translation of choruses from Iphigeneia at Aulis and Hippolytus, an adaptation of Hippolytus called Hippolytus Temporizes (1927), a translation of choruses from The Bacchae and Hecuba (1931), and Euripides' Ion (1937) a loose translation of Ion.[32]" Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:56, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I cut it for now. If a short statement on her translation work is needed, it should be in the next subsection and be sourced better. If the bit about her continuing alliance with Imagism is needed, it should be restored at the end of this subsection and be soured better. I feel pretty good about the way the section reads without this. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * We go from here, to an excerpt from a poem without being told what that excerpt is or why it's there: "and her work later appeared in Aldington's Imagist Anthology 1930."
 * Re-ordered. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks Sandy. I knocked out the easy ones as noted above. I'm sure there's more that needs to be reworked in the lead and have been hoping to leave that to the end. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 20:49, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Once you're through these (lead last), I'll continue on talk here. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  22:10, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Once Sandy's satisfied, ping me and I'll take a look. Sorry I could get to this earlier, I got busy last week. Hog Farm Talk 22:15, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * A couple more done, with some judgment calls made. See comments above. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 02:00, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Rest are done! Please review and let me know. My eyes are on the talk page for the next set when you're ready. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 04:11, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * On it today ... at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review/H.D./archive2. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  14:25, 19 September 2022 (UTC)

Good progress made on talk page, but there are still a few bits that need to be tidied when Ceoil can get to them (not right away), and we'll ping in Hog Farm for a look once Ceoil has gotten to that, and Firefangledfeathers has had a pass as well ... so you're off the hook for a week or two. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  02:09, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Update talk page work still underway. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  13:30, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

DrKay (talk) 17:24, 15 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Keep; I've done all the damage I can do. The Br/Am English needs to be addressed, but Firefangledfeathers is on it.   ready for a final look. Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  19:17, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Awesome! Thanks a mint, SG. If someone wants to re-hash the American Revolutionary War and stop me from Yankeefying the whole thing, better act quick! Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 19:22, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * The articles uses mdy (indicating a US preference), and I saw only three British-isms, so I think Yankeeficiation in order. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  19:28, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I'll try to look over it, but it's probably gonna be several days - I'm pretty swamped in RL right now. Hog Farm Talk 23:03, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I left some comments at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review/H.D./archive2. I expect to be at a keep after the resolution of those. Hog Farm Talk 23:59, 11 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Keep, my concerns have been satisfactorily resolved. Hog Farm Talk 13:32, 12 October 2022 (UTC)
 * The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.