Wikipedia:Featured article review/President of Ireland/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was removed 15:36, 6 September 2007.

Review commentary

 * ''Messages left at Ludraman, Jtdirl, Iota, Djegan, Irish noticeboard, WP Political figures and WP Ireland

President of Ireland was promoted in 2004, and the nominator was not a main editor. The talk page mentions errors in the Irish language. The article is almost entirely uncited, is listy towards the end, could use cleanup of See also, and has some MOS issues (WP:DASH, WP:MOSBOLD, WP:MOSNUM, WP:MSH—easily fixed). The lead could also be expanded. Needs review per 1c and 2. Pre-review version. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:02, 29 July 2007 (UTC)


 * WP:MOS, listiness, and See also corrected already; citations and possible Irish errors remain. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:32, 29 July 2007 (UTC)


 * Comment: Definitely needs expanded lead to at least 3 or even 4 paras, plus inline citations are seriously lacking. ww2censor 17:37, 29 July 2007 (UTC)
 * I'm currently working, albeit slowly, on inline citations but can someone please work on the lead. ww2censor 14:07, 13 August 2007 (UTC)


 * Comment It's not bad; the lead needs to be filled out as above, it needs a light copyedit. There are many many sources to choose from. Ceoil 20:53, 29 July 2007 (UTC)
 * Remove unless significantly improved. Citation is far too weak to be of FA status today, and that's not mentioning the other problems raised and commented on here and the talk page. As it stands this article would definitely not pass FA nomination, and I'm not even sure about GA nomination either. I will remove my vote if article finds a hard working hero to rescue it. Regards, Deacon of Pndapetzim ( Talk ) 02:46, 12 August 2007 (UTC)

Keep or Remove are not declared during the review phase, which is intended to suggest and facilitate improvements; please see the instructions at WP:FAR. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 13:35, 13 August 2007 (UTC)

FARC commentary

 * Suggested FA criteria concerns are citations (1c), MoS issues (2), LEAD (2a). Marskell 09:04, 14 August 2007 (UTC)


 * Remove per 1c. LuciferMorgan 12:15, 17 August 2007 (UTC)
 * Remove per 1c. Onnaghar tl 14:15, 21 August 2007 (UTC)


 * Remove—1c and 2a.
 * Lead: totally inadequate in length and scope. "The President is usually directly elected by the people for seven years"—usually? What can this mean? I see further down that there is an exception to the seven years, but heck, it's not worth flaggin in this abstruse way in the lead. Remove "certain" as redundant. Last sentence awkward. Yuck.Tony 13:27, 24 August 2007 (UTC)
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