Wikipedia:Featured article review/Salvador Dalí/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was removed by YellowAssessmentMonkey 02:12, 28 October 2009.

Review commentary

 * Notified: Daniel Nuyu, Wikiproject Biography, Wikiproject Visual arts, Wikiproject Spain

This article, in my opinion, is not a Featured Article, because the article does not fulfill the criteria in the FA process.
 * 1 (a) well-written: its prose is engaging, even brilliant, and of a professional standard;
 * The lead is choppy and short. Especially with Dalí was highly imaginative, and also had an affinity for partaking in unusual and grandiose behavior, in order to draw attention to himself. This sometimes irked those who loved his art as much as it annoyed his critics, since his eccentric manner sometimes drew more public attention than his artwork. This seems like an opinion on his technique, rather than fact.
 * Poorly written sentences -


 * When he was five, Dalí was taken to his brother's grave and told by his parents that he was his brother's reincarnation,[9] a concept which he came to believe.


 * After her death, Dalí's father married his deceased wife's sister (why not say "wife's sister" and what was the sister's name?).


 * Chronology error:


 * Dalí also had a sister, Ana María, who was three years younger than he.[7] In 1949, she published a book about her brother, Dalí As Seen By His Sister.[12] His childhood friends included future FC Barcelona footballers Sagibarbá and Josep Samitier. During holidays at the Catalan resort of Cadaqués, the trio played football together.
 * 1 (c) well-researched: it is a thorough and representative survey of the relevant literature on the topic. Claims are verifiable against high-quality reliable sources and are supported with citations; this requires a "References" section that lists these sources, complemented by inline citations where appropriate;
 * I see many instances of [citation needed] throughout the article. Also, the some links are dead links or not properly formatted.


 * 2 (a) a lead: a concise lead section that summarizes the topic and prepares the reader for the detail in the subsequent sections;
 * Lead is too short and choppy.

Some other issues may exist, because I just made a quick glance over.  miranda   18:48, 26 September 2009 (UTC)


 * Comment. Images need alt text as per WP:ALT. Eubulides (talk) 19:26, 26 September 2009 (UTC)

FARC commentary

 * ''Suggested FA criteria concern are citations. Also note the recent change to WP:WIAFA (1c) requiring "high-quality" sources.


 * Delist - Very little to no effort has been made to address my concerns.  miranda   04:52, 15 October 2009 (UTC)
 * The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.