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 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by 10:01, 20 May 2013 (UTC).

Citra Award for Best Leading Actress

 * Nominator(s): — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:29, 4 May 2013 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured list because I'm certain it meets the requirements. Following the Citra Award for Best Director, I give you the leading ladies. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:29, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Comment: Looks quite good but it seems to already have the bronze star at the top right, this might be a mistake somehow? &mdash; Cirt (talk) 15:47, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
 * LOL, nuked. That was left over from the Directors list, which I used as the basis for this one. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:09, 4 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Support. There's a boatload of redlinks on the page which is kinda glaringly crying out for creation of new article stubs at least ... but otherwise, seems to be high quality indeed. &mdash; Cirt (talk) 08:13, 8 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the support! By my count five articles would get rid of 80% of the redlinks (shame the whole field is so poorly covered on Wikipedia...). — Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:28, 8 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Support – meets all 6 FL criteria. Good job! —Bloom6132 (talk) 20:36, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:22, 9 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Support. Formatting and prose look good. It might not be a bad idea to fire in some quick alt text for the images, though it's more of an academic issue since they're all descriptively similar enough that it wouldn't really make a noticeable difference. I would however reworded the sentence "Four films have seen multiple cast members receive nominations, although of these only Mengejar Mas-Mass Dinna Olivia received the award"—what you're going for here is to say that Mengejar Mas-Mas is the only film to feature multiple noms with a win, but filling in all the information in the sentence at once like that makes it a little confusing. Try splitting it up a bit, perhaps as "Four films have seen multiple cast members receive nominations. Of these, only Mengejar Mas-Mass earned a win, with Dinna Olivia receiving the award" (feel free to tinker as my prose style isn't the best). Aside from that I'm more than happy with this list. GRAPPLE   X'  18:26, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Done both, thanks for the review! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:19, 12 May 2013 (UTC)

Comments
 * Check image captions - complete sentences need to take a full stop.
 * Done — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:57, 16 May 2013 (UTC)


 * "recognition" and "recognised" in quick succession...
 * Fixed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:57, 16 May 2013 (UTC)


 * That second sentence is quite lengthy, I'd split it.
 * Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:32, 17 May 2013 (UTC)


 * "recipients from a shortlist of three to six films." mildly confusing, it's a shortlist of people, not films, surely?
 * Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:32, 17 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Just curious, what's the meaning/origin of "Citra"?
 * "image" or "view", such as "citra diri" (self-image) — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:57, 16 May 2013 (UTC)


 * "were first given at " - were first presented at... perhaps?
 * Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:57, 16 May 2013 (UTC)


 * "In 1973 the IFF began to be held annually." not great, maybe "From 1973, the IFF were held annually"?
 * No, as IFF is "Indonesian Film Festival" (singular). Done with "was" — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:57, 16 May 2013 (UTC)


 * "who won six awards out of ten" six awards from ten...
 * Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:57, 16 May 2013 (UTC)


 * "receive concurrent nominations" I found that mildly confusing, perhaps "more than one nomination in a single year" or something similar?
 * Done — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:57, 16 May 2013 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 07:19, 16 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, The Rambling Man. I think I got everything. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:08, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
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