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 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was archived by The Rambling Man via FACBot (talk) 00:25, 22 August 2018 (UTC).

List of Puella Magi Madoka Magica episodes

 * Nominator(s): Deidaramonroe (talk) 18:11, 22 June 2018 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured list because I believe it qualifies under the featured list criteria, as well as satisfying project-specific criteria such as WP:FICT. Deidaramonroe (talk) 18:11, 22 June 2018 (UTC)

Because I am not familiar with the series, I can offer only these style-related suggestions for improvement. TompaDompa (talk) 23:39, 10 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Comments by TompaDompa
 * "It follows the story of Madoka Kaname" – who is she? I'd suggest adding a few words before the name to describe her characteristics (maybe age, occupation, nationality – whatever is relevant to know).
 * "During early planning stage" – missing definite article.
 * "decided to not adapt" – I would swap the second and third word for better flow.
 * "He then contacted Gen Urobuchi to work on the project as a scriptwriter and Ume Aoki as a character designer." – I would suggest rephrasing this to "Gen Urobuchi and Ume Aoki then joined the project as scriptwriter and character designer, respectively." The production history should not receive undue focus in the WP:LEAD.
 * "The first ten episodes aired on MBS, TBS and CBC" – I would add a few words to clarify that these are television channels (right?). Assuming they are all Japanese, I would mention that too.
 * "a week after broadcast" – I would change "a" to "one".
 * "due to the quake" – "quake" is too informal. Use "earthquake".
 * "each volume containing a bonus CD" – this is unnecessary since it's described in more detail in the next paragraph.
 * Where several references directly follow each other, it looks better if they appear in numerical order.
 * "while the ending theme" – "and" is better than "while" since we're not trying to contrast the two.
 * "Kalafina, both of which were released" – I'd change the comma to a semicolon and remove "of which".
 * "were released on February 16, 2011" – released how, which format?
 * "limited edition" should have a hyphen when used attributively.
 * "with a third film containing an original story set after the series released in October 2013" – I'd change "with" to "and" and add "was" before "released".
 * The table should not be sortable.
 * "No." should be No. (i.e. ).
 * The episode descriptions contain a lot of sentences with three or more commas. It is usually preferable to rewrite the sentences to avoid this, though not critical.
 * "enroll into" – I've never heard this phrasing. I've always heard "enroll in".
 * Explain and/or link "familiar" at first appearance.
 * "their attempted suicide" – I would rephrase it as "the attempted mass suicide".
 * "doesn't" should be "does not" per MOS:CONTRACTION.
 * "the term 'magical girl' only makes sense for it to be a prelude to whomever has yet to become a 'witch'." – this should be rephrased. I had to read it a couple of times to be able to parse it correctly, and it's still kind of odd.
 * "Thus the process is only feasible with humans, especially adolescent girls." – this seems like a non sequitur to me, but maybe that has more to do with the series than the summary.
 * "Lacking confidence in herself, having been in hospital for the past six months" – I'd change this to either "[...] herself as she had been [...]" or "[...] herself, and having been [...]" depending on which is more accurate.
 * Replace "PE" with "physical education", "gym class", or a synonym. I'd also consider linking the term you choose for those who may only be familiar with some other term for it.
 * "The girls head to the beach" – I would name the girls.
 * In the Home video releases section, all hyphens except the ones in "Mini-poster", "Double-side", and "4-page" should be replaced with en dashes.
 * Some of the references lack access dates (and other parameters).


 * has not edited since late-June. If this ping is not responded to or if this nomination is not adopted by someone else, it will be archived in the next few days.  Thank you  in any case for such a good review. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:35, 17 August 2018 (UTC)


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