Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Slipknot concert tours/archive3


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by Dabomb87 22:25, 29 April 2010.

List of Slipknot concert tours

 * ''Nominator(s): Crowz  RSA  17:21, 5 April 2010 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured list because I believe it meets the criteria and has received a lot of work. It definitely has enough references. It has recently received a peer review and I really think it's ready to be FL. Crowz  RSA  17:21, 5 April 2010 (UTC)

Oppose
 * What's an "early tour"?
 * An early tour generally represents a tour that did not have shows outside of North America, and/or do not have any legs with actual names. Crowz  RSA  21:01, 28 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry but that prose is weak (for me). The Rambling Man (talk) 21:20, 28 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Well actually did not name it this, Nergaal did, so I'll ask them.  Crowz  RSA  21:29, 28 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Actually Nergaal hasn't contributed since February.


 * I'd like the prose revisited by an independent reviewer.


 * Oppose I'll point out some issues, but with the caveat that this is not an exhaustive list- it needs an independent copy edit.
 * "Slipknot is an American heavy metal band from Des Moines, Iowa, formed in 1995, currently consisting of four early tours, and three world tours. " Bands are made up of members- this sentence needs a rewrite
 * "The band's first concert tour was of the United States with the 1999 Ozzfest, founded by Ozzy Osbourne and his wife Sharon Osbourne in 1996 and featured live performances by heavy metal bands." Who are Ozzy and Sharon Osbourne, and why should we care?  *In other words, wikilink for context)
 * "which was taken off their 1999 debut album" Try 'removed'.
 * What is the delineation between early tours and world tours, and why, with 4 continents, is the "World Domination Tour" considered the former?
 * "Slipknot toured in countries they had never performed in before, such as Israel, Luxembourg, and several other countries."The repition of countries makes this feel clunky.
 * "This was usually caused by injuries." Is this really the best way to end the lede? It seems a strange ending to me.
 * The referencing needs work; just checking a few here at random: (numbers as of this revision)
 * Ref 47 gives an author and publishing date
 * Same for 38
 * 79; "WebCite" is not an appropriate title for that ref. Give more information
 * 54 gives an author
 * 107 has an author and publishing date
 * Same for 33
 * Again for 43.

That's about 50% of the ones I checked that have more information at a glance than is included in the footnotes, that ought to be there if available. Bradjamesbrown (talk) 09:35, 29 April 2010 (UTC)


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