Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Twin Peaks episodes


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by User:The Rambling Man 14:08, 4 July 2008.

List of Twin Peaks episodes
A few days ago, I saw that this list of one of my favorite TV shows wasn't in very good shape. It wasn't terrible but it definitely needed some sprucing. So I got some sources and expanded the list and even included a cover and detailed synopses for each season. Looking at it now, it does seem a lot better, even if do say so myself! So review the list and tell me whether it seemed like "a damn fine cup of coffee" or not. Thanks! (SUDUSER)85 15:31, 10 June 2008 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:58, 10 June 2008 (UTC) ✅ all suggestions by The Rambling Man have been addressed by (SUDUSER)85. (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Quick comments from
 * No bold links in the opening section of the lead please.
 * ✅ fixed (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Place citations per WP:CITE, i.e. immediately after punctuation where possible.
 * ✅ (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * " To date, both seasons of Twin Peaks have been released on..." why To date? Won't this always be the case from now on?
 * ✅ fixed (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Why are the number of episodes (in total and each series) in bold?
 * ✅ rmv for individual seasons, but I thought it's supposed to be there in the lead, that's the case for lists like List of Seinfeld episodes and List of The Sopranos episodes. (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * " spanning two seasons of 30 episodes, until its cancellation" - no, it still spans two seasons of 30 episodes. Subsequently it was cancelled.
 * ✅ Sentence reworked. (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Last sentence of lead not cited.
 * ✅ Fortunately I had the book Lynch on Lynch (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "1990–91" rather than "1990 – 1991", or at least axe the spaces.
 * ✅ Spaces axed (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * What makes episode world a reliable source?
 * ✅ rmv (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Second general reference and third external link are essentially identical, probably lose the ext. link.
 * ✅ rmv to include just one in the general refs. (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments (edit conflicted with Rambling Man above)

Gary King ( talk ) 16:00, 10 June 2008 (UTC) ✅ all suggestions by Gary King have been addressed by (SUDUSER)85. (SUDUSER)85 13:36, 11 June 2008 (UTC)


 * ✅ Remove the bold from "of 30 episodes. " (SUDUSER)85 13:13, 2 July 2008 (UTC)

Gary King ( talk ) 17:58, 29 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Support Gary King ( talk ) 16:10, 2 July 2008 (UTC)

now Support -- Gman 124 talk 04:39, 12 June 2008 (UTC)

Comment
 * I did a quick review. I would like to support this because the list is appropriately structured and sourced, and the article has a good lead. However, I see a need for copy-editing of the season and episode descriptions. I have fixed one sentence whose wording really bothered me and a second sentence that was awkward, but I still see other opportunities for improvement. For example, I am bothered by trite verbosity such as "...expose Twin Peaks as the disturbed, unsettling town that it is" and the numerous sentences that are strung together by "and"s and commas. Skimming the article, I also detect a few misspellings. --Orlady (talk) 00:45, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Malachirality appears to be inactive at the moment. So I've approached Golbez instead. (SUDUSER)85 15:07, 29 June 2008 (UTC)
 * I've done some of the needed copy-editing, but I continue to think that more is needed. I am not a particularly good candidate for this job because I think the writing style used in these and other episode descriptions is horrifying. Having said that, here are some examples of items that I think are particularly important to fix:
 * ✅ One piece of awkward wording that has me stymied is "Leo's battered housewife Shelly decides to get revenge." The noun "housewife" is not normally preceded by a possessive. Is Shelly the wife of Leo? In that case, perhaps she should be called "Leo's battered wife." Is it important to call her "housewife" instead of "wife"?
 * ✅ In the sentence fragment "Cooper has a vision of a mysterious giant, as he lies bleeding from a serious gunshot wound," am I correct in thinking that Cooper is the one who lies bleeding and not the mysterious giant (which is what the word order implies)?
 * In the sentence fragment "Josie returns from Seattle, bearing her 'cousin' Jonathan from Hong Kong in tow," is there a literal meaning to the words "bearing" and "in tow" (that is, was she carrying and/or towing him?) or are these words merely being used as idiomatic expressions meaning "with"?
 * --Orlady (talk) 16:50, 2 July 2008 (UTC)

✅ All fixed. (SUDUSER)85 06:26, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
 * ✅ Glad to see the changes. However, I am still puzzled by the wording "bearing her 'cousin' Jonathan from Hong Kong." Why is the word "bearing" used here? Was she physically carrying him, or could this word be changed to "bringing" or "accompanied by"? --Orlady (talk) 11:43, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Changed it to "bringing." (SUDUSER)85 07:29, 4 July 2008 (UTC)
 * OK, I can support this now (although I would prefer to see writing that is not so larded with clichéd expressions).--Orlady (talk) 12:40, 4 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Alright then thanks! (SUDUSER)85 14:20, 4 July 2008 (UTC)
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