Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/National symbols of Sri Lanka/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was archived by Crisco 1492 14:42, 4 April 2015.

National symbols of Sri Lanka

 * Nominator(s): Anton Talk  17:03, 6 February 2015 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured list because the list received peer review and archived. Also, it is a well-written and well-sourced. I see it as an interesting list since it gives a nutshell view about a country. The feedback that it is going to receive, would help to work on more lists, and these might help to start new lists of National symbols. Anton Talk  17:03, 6 February 2015 (UTC)

Comments two months without a single review? Wow, what's happening around here...? There's far too much to deal with here. I'm surprised that this has been peer reviewed. In summary, I oppose the list in its current form. In general, this needs a serious copy edit by a native English speaker as the prose is not up to scratch at all. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:36, 4 April 2015 (UTC)
 * Lead is a bit weak, the first two sentences starting with exactly the same phrasing. I would decapitalise the first National as well.
 * When listing the national symbols in the lead, you probably don't need to keep repeating "national", and it's probably worth just focusing on the important ones and discuss them a little rather than just list everything that's in the table.
 * I don't understand the two notes in the lead image.
 * "They were picked up and officially announced at various times." very poor English.
 * The second para of the lead starts "the Democratic Socialist Republic of Sri Lanka sets out" but the first para just referred to Sri Lanka as simply Sri Lanka. This para then goes on to state where four of the symbols were agreed upon and ratified, what about all the others?
 * "National anthem of Sri Lanka.." -> "The national anthem of..."
 * "and tuned by" what?
 * "tuned by Rabindranath Tagore.[5] and it was later composed by" grammar error and how could it be later composed by someone else?
 * "First performance of the anthem" this should all be written in prose, not bullet point note form.
 * "the independence from British" British what?
 * "First performance of the anthem was held in" performances are normally held on dates, not in them.
 * "The national emblem of Sri Lanka uses by Sri Lankan government" "used by the".....


 * — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:37, 4 April 2015 (UTC)


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