Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/The Simpsons (season 14)/archive2


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by The Rambling Man 16:42, 16 June 2009.

The Simpsons (season 14)

 * Nominator(s): Scorpion 0422  19:52, 27 May 2009 (UTC)

The previous nomination failed because of a lack of polished language. I have since copyedited the text and I believe that it ha simproved. Enjoy! -- Scorpion 0422  19:52, 27 May 2009 (UTC)

Excellent list overall, but I want more of what transpires in the episodes. Reywas92 Talk 02:50, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Comments
 * It's a great list, but the episode descriptions just seem bland. They seem generic and incomplete. I've seen most of these episodes and their summaries don't cut it. WP:SPOIL it a little bit. They all have good, identifiable short summaries, but they should go into a little more detail.
 * Write the external links as external links, not as references.
 * I fixed the external links and I tried expanding the summaries. -- Scorpion 0422  22:32, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Support Much better. Reywas92 Talk  00:49, 3 June 2009 (UTC)


 * Comment there should be a Reception section too. Nergaal (talk) 01:02, 5 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Isn't the awards section enough?  The Le ft orium  12:27, 5 June 2009 (UTC)
 * I meant something like Ratings in the The Simpsons (season 5) list. Nergaal (talk) 18:17, 7 June 2009 (UTC)


 * Comment - It seems a bit odd that two consecutive paragraphs in the Awards section begin with "Other nominations include:". Support otherwise. – Juliancolton  &#124; Talk 22:41, 5 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Those two paragraphs were almost exact copies of one another. It was an error on my part and I'm not entirely sure how that happened. --  Scorpion 0422  00:22, 6 June 2009 (UTC)

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:36, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:36, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments Lots of stuff here, much of it simple copyediting things.
 * Probably want to link show runner, it's a specialized term.
 * Done.
 * In the production section, can'tyou link to the appropriate section in the recurring Simpsons character article for characters like Agne Skinner and Maude Flanders?
 * Done.
 * More in a few minutes... Geraldk (talk) 16:21, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

I know that's a lot. Sorry I didn't get around to reviewing it sooner. Geraldk (talk) 17:14, 9 June 2009 (UTC)
 * when you're listing the annie awards, either drop the colon and semicolons for commas, the only way a colon works is if the first clause in the sentence is, "The show won four Annie Awards", which starts the previous sentence. While you're at it, starting two consecutive sentences with a variation of 'the show won' doesn't flow well.
 * Done.
 * "in the category" should be 'that category'
 * Done.
 * The last paragraph where you list other nominations needs rewriting. It's doesn't flow particularly well. Too many commas, too many clauses.
 * Done.
 * "whose ghost, along with other infamous criminals" was it other criminals or the ghosts of other criminals?
 * Fixed.
 * "The rock stars ask Homer help out at a concert" - missing a 'to'
 * Fixed.
 * "After Grimes is arrested, Bob tries to kill Bart, but he finds that he cannot do it." - could use clarity. Physically can't do it? Moral qualms?
 * Fixed.
 * "to nominate her for Teacher of the Year Award" should be 'a' or 'the' teacher of the year award
 * Fixed.
 * Also in Special Edna, one sentence says that Skinner was given a trip to Epcot, another says he followed Edna there. So did he go for free or stalk her? It's a little unclear.
 * I'm not sure who added that, but Skinner followed Edna there. Fixed.
 * 'The Dad Who Knew Too Little' needs work. They didn't go on the run because of the bill, they went on the run b/c Lisa was accused of a crime. Also, there's little in the summary about the last half of the show and the whole circus scene.
 * Expanded.
 * In 'Pray anything', first two sentences start with 'Homer'.
 * Fixed.
 * "Tony Hawk lives on one of the above floors" - floors above?
 * Fixed.
 * "he will never ill-treat him again" is unwieldy, try 'will never treat him badly again' and in the previous sentence, you have a stary them that seems to be referring to only Homer, so specify 'his family' if that's who he says it to
 * Fixed.
 * "Homer decides to quit give ownership back to Burns" missing 'and'
 * Fixed.
 * "and suggests that pick one career" missing 'she'
 * Fixed.
 * "only results in a rise in the crime rate" 'an increase' works better than 'a rise'
 * Done.
 * "Meanwhile, Bart and Homer go to war with a group of beavers" <--- just about the funniest line I've ever read on wikipedia. May need a tiny bit more explanation, otherwise it's just pretty damn random.
 * Well, the subplot itself is pretty damn random. I clarified it a bit. The problem with these summaries is that you need to keep them short, and some of them have very complex storylines that require explanation. One way to shorten them is to avoid too much detail about any sub-plots.
 * "Old Yeller Belly" and the last two episodes also need more about the end of the episodes.
 * Done, done and done.
 * No problem, I'm just glad you took a look. -- Scorpion 0422  18:15, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

Support - a well done list. Geraldk (talk)
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