Wikipedia:Good article reassessment/Episode 210/1

Episode 210

 * • Watch article reassessment page
 * Result: No action per consensus, including the nominator. The prose has been improved by several copyedits. Geometry guy 14:52, 18 May 2008 (UTC)

I'm very concerned about the prose in this article - it's really bad and choppy. Otherwise, the article's fine, but the prose isn't. Sceptre (talk) 01:39, 28 April 2008 (UTC)


 * I can see there is some poor prose. For instance:
 * Tracy Jordan (Tracy Morgan) buys a coffee machine which he stations at Kenneth Parcell's desk. Kenneth then gradually develops a coffee addiction throughout the course of the episode.
 * In the first sentence "stations" is a bad choice of word, and the second sentence should be rewritten less redundantly.
 * Can you clarify what you mean by "choppy", maybe with an example? Thanks. Geometry guy 22:08, 28 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There are quite a lot of commas in places where they shouldn't be, making the reader insert unnecessary pauses when reading. Sceptre (talk) 23:59, 2 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment. The writing is far from brilliant - far enough that the article fails criteria 1a and 1b. Sceptre's examples are just the tip of the iceberg. Unless the someone improves the prose we should delist this article. Majoreditor (talk) 21:10, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Delist. Barring significant copyediting, this should not be listed as a GA. (Discount vote if said copyediting takes place.) dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 06:30, 9 May 2008 (UTC) (struck per 00:21, 13 May 2008 (UTC) comment, more from me below...)
 * Comment. I've given this a going-over, but my edits need to be checked for accuracy, and I'm not sure if they are enough to overcome the objections. Geometry guy 20:07, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
 * It's much improved. There may be some minor wordsmithing to do, but the article is now in such a state that I lean toward keeping its GA status. Majoreditor (talk) 00:21, 13 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * There is no mention in the lead of how Episode 210 became the episode's title.
 * The subheadings in the Reception section probably aren't necessary.
 * The Continuity and Cultural references sections would probably work better if merged (somehow) with the Plot section, to create a general section about the episode's content.
 * Dates in the Production section need wlinking per WP:DATE
 * dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 10:39, 13 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment I've done a quick copyedit (mainly trying to help the prose flow and address some of DHMO's comments). One item that needs clarification in the article: who or what is "TGS"? EyeSerene talk 14:23, 13 May 2008 (UTC)
 * I've clarified TGS based on enwiki info. There appears to be no will to recommend delisting, so I suggest closing as "no action", unless anyone objects. Geometry guy 22:44, 17 May 2008 (UTC)
 * No issues with that from me. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 01:19, 18 May 2008 (UTC)
 * I agree with the recommendation to close as no action. Majoreditor (talk) 02:07, 18 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Fine with no-action. Sceptre (talk) 02:19, 18 May 2008 (UTC)