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1947 Sydney hailstorm
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because... I'd like some feedback on grammar, structure, and length, and whether this stands a chance at FAC.

Thanks, Daniel (talk) 08:46, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

dihydrogen monoxide

 * Hailstroms fail WP:N ;)
 * Inactionable :)
 * sure it is. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 22:16, 13 March 2008 (UTC)


 * Infobox image?
 * Erm, struggling. There's really no images available, except the ones I already have. I've added a barometric map from the day of the event.
 * The image at User:Daniel/Sandbox/Hailstorms in Sydney could go in the infobox, as you did with that other FA storm.


 * The em dashes in the References section look odd
 * Changed to regular dashes.


 * Is the Damage section of the infobox for summarising injuries, or something else?
 * No, dollar amount.


 * Move images to Commons
 * You can - I'm hopeless :)
 * In future, this does it automatically. I'll do it today :) dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 22:16, 13 March 2008 (UTC)


 * "presumed to be thunder," - might need a source for this statement
 * I've moved the reference forward.


 * "as "though [he] was back in the firing line overseas"" - need a source for the quote. Also per WP:MOS you don't need quotation marks and italics (for the whole article)
 * Ditto above for the reference. For the quotes, fixed, although I think it looks better the other way :)
 * It does, usually, but there's this thing called consensus ;) dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 22:16, 13 March 2008 (UTC)


 * "of the main Central railway station" - not sure if it should be capitalised...
 * You can tell you aren't a Sydney resident :) It is meant to be capitalised, but I can see why one may think otherwise

As usual, nice stuff. Looking forward to FAC. No concerns re. length. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 09:15, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Cheers, thanks for that. Will post my notes to yours tomorrow afternoon. Daniel (talk) 11:31, 13 March 2008 (UTC)