Wikipedia:Peer review/1974–75 Buffalo Sabres season/archive1

1974–75 Buffalo Sabres season
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because the GAC2 reviewer suggested some copyediting at PR.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:30, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: I agree that the article needs copyediting, but PR is not the place to seek it. The reviewers here do some incidental c/e as they go, but they are generally spread too thin to polish whole articles. You might ask someone at WP:PRV or trade c/e favors with another Wikipedia editor. Copyediting this article does not look like a really big job because the text is fairly short. What's needed is careful proofing and a bit of polish. Here are a few other suggestions or comments:


 * Here's an example of a small but useful c/e change: "between October 26, 1974 — December 8, 1974 to move to a 21–4–4 record" - In constructions like this, replace the em dash with the word "and" so that the sentence makes sense when read aloud; i.e., "between October 26, 1974, and December 8, 1974". Even better would be "between October 26 and December 8, 1974".
 * Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:22, 1 September 2010 (UTC)


 * No dead urls, no dabs.


 * Image license looks fine.


 * References look fine.


 * Does it make sense to sort the players in the "Skaters" table by first name? A last-name sort would be useful.
 * They are sorting by last name (except bench minor, which is not a player)--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:29, 1 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Should something appear in the empty boxes for "Acquisition" in the "Skaters" table?
 * Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:12, 1 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Can the missing data for Bench Minor be added? Or is Bench Minor a category rather than a player? If so, should this be explained? If minor players are missing from the list, can they be listed in a footnote?
 * A bench minor is when the team is penalized for a minor infraction that is not attributed to any individual player. Now noted below the table.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:15, 1 September 2010 (UTC)


 * The second paragraph of the "Stanley Cup Finals" section is too long for comfortable reading. Two or three paragraphs would be better.
 * Thanks. Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:18, 1 September 2010 (UTC)

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 19:31, 14 August 2010 (UTC)