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2007 WWE Draft
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to improve the article from it's previous FLC, and make sure the next time it goes to FLC, it will pass, any concerns or problems, please list them here. Thank You!

Thanks,  S R  X  16:08, 25 May 2008 (UTC)


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Finetooth comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement:
 * The lead should summarize the main points developed in the later sections of the article and should not cover material that is not mentioned in the main text. This article has no lead (summary) but instead is structured like a short essay with two charts. I would suggest a re-write that moves the text sections together, re-organizes them, and tops them with a short lead that summarizes their content. I'd also move the charts at the bottom, below the text. See WP:LEAD for guidelines.
 * Another copyedit after the re-write would be a good idea.
 * I've looked for but failed to find any WWE articles that are GA or FA, but you might look at articles about other sports such as basketball to see how other authors and editors create articles about drafts.
 * The photo of The Great Khali is almost too dark to see. Perhaps a better one can be found.
 * Numbers larger than nine are generally rendered as digits; for example 20-minute intervals and 27 superstars.

I realize this is a short review by someone who is not a wrestling expert, but I hope this helps. Finetooth (talk) 05:50, 28 May 2008 (UTC)

Further Finetooth comments: Overnight I realized that you were not aiming for FA but for FL. In the interest of full disclosure, I should say that I have never reviewed or contributed to or edited an FL list prospect before this one. Looking at WP:FL, I see that quite a few WWE lists have made FL. You might review some of them to see how other editors have handled the leads. You might also look at draft-related FL articles in other sports; an example would be 2007 NFL Draft. Sorry about the mixup. Finetooth (talk) 02:06, 29 May 2008 (UTC)