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2008 Mumbai attacks
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to try to work on this article to get it to FA status, given the importance of the article wrt the country. And for that, i would like to get a peer review so I can improve out the little bits to get it the FA status
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, TheOriginalSoni (talk) 19:29, 5 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Hi. I wouldn't mind doing this peer review.  It is customary for the nominator to make a pass through the article first, fixing as much as they can, before requesting a peer review.   I see that you made two edits to this article on 5 Nov 2012: the 2nd reverted the 1st.  Are there any other edits you've made?   If not, I recommend that you read the FA criteria at Featured_article_criteria, then go through the article sentence-by-sentence, making improvements that you can find.  Then request a peer review.  If you need help understanding the FA Criteria, or if you have any questions on how to apply them, I'd be happy to help ... just drop a note on my talk page. --Noleander (talk) 15:11, 18 November 2012 (UTC)
 * To give you an idea of the sort of improvements that could be made:
 * In section "Kasab's trial" - first two paragraphs need citations
 * The article needs a subsection on "Motivations" explaining the suspected reasons/purposes/goals/etc of the terrorists.
 * Wording is not smooth & professional in some places. E.g. "There have been many bombings in Mumbai since the 13 coordinated bomb explosions that killed 257 people and injured 700 on 12 March 1993.[27] The 1993 attacks are believed to have been in retaliation for the Babri Mosque demolition.[28]"  That section needs to be written to introduce the reader to the history: assume the reader has no knowledge of the history.  As it is now, it assumes that the reader  knows about the 1993 attack.
 * Run all the following tools on the article to find and fix some problems:
 * Find broken external URL links with http://toolserver.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/webchecklinks.py?page=ARTICLENAMEHERE
 * Find ambig links with   http://toolserver.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/dablinks.py?page=ARTICLENAMEHERE
 * Citation tool: This tool will edit the article and will combine duplicate cites: http://toolserver.org/~verisimilus/Bot/DOI_bot/doibot.php?edit=toolbar&slow=1&page=ARTICLENAMEHERE
 * Show Alt text for pictures with http://toolserver.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/altviewer.py?page=ARTICLENAMEHERE
 * Find repeating links with tool on left page sidebar
 * Copyright violations: Coren's tool
 * Another copyright vio: Earwigs tool
 * for example, the "broken external URL" tool shows several dead external links that need to be fixed. --Noleander (talk) 15:19, 18 November 2012 (UTC)