Wikipedia:Peer review/2011 Garmin-Cervélo season/archive1

2011 Garmin-Cervélo season
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because…I'd like to get it to FA. It's really that simple. I think it's quite potentially good enough, but it would be very good to get more and fresher eyes on it.

Thanks, Green-eyed girl  ( Talk  ·  Contribs ) 18:07, 20 April 2012 (UTC)

Comments - general comment, lots of opinion and unencyclopedic phrasing throughout, suggest you get an independent copyedit done.
 * Any reason why there's no en-dash being used in the team title per WP:DASH?
 * After a long discussion in late 2009, the consensus at the manual of style was that names of cycling teams that consist of two sponsors should be written with a hyphen and not a dash. (See here.) That is the convention that the cycling project has followed since.--EdgeNavidad (Talk · Contribs) 19:52, 27 April 2012 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 07:20, 25 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "The 2011 season ..." what season? What competition?
 * "perhaps chief among them " opinion, not encyclopedic. Could just say "including".
 * " 26 victories in 2011, 25 of which officially count" pardon?
 * Suggest you link Tour de France.
 * "Also.... also... also" repetitive.
 * Strange ending to the lead with the sacking of someone just after the first race. Reads a little odd to me.
 * In the tables for riders coming and going, there's an inconsistent level of linking, e.g. "Ramunas Navardauskas" joining has no ref, while Kirk Carlsen leaving has none either.
 * What's a "field sprint"?
 * I'm not sure the source used suggests the result was declared "moot".
 * If you haven't mentioned the riders full name in prose, I suggest you do so the first time.
 * "The team was active at" is a very odd saying for me. Do you mean they took part in the various competitions?
 * "Farrar just missed out on the podium at Kuurne–Brussels–Kuurne. He took fourth...." merge.
 * "race in 18th place 27 seconds " comma after "place".
 * Our article has Giro di Toscana not Giro della Toscana.
 * "had few noteworthy performances " reads like a newspaper rather than an encyclopedic article.
 * I think you should adopt a consistent approach to the use of hyphens, unspaced and spaced en-dashes in the names of races which go from A to B, right now it looks messy.
 * "the race and the entire cycling world were turned sideways" again, tabloid-esque. Stick to facts, this is an encyclopedia.
 * Avoid squashing text between images.
 * Rider column doesn't sort correctly.
 * Don't have blank cells for Location.
 * Don't mix date formats in the refs.
 * Are author names First Last or Last, First? Be consistent.