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2012 Philippine Peace Cup
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to promote it to GA, it is an historical event for the Philippines for winning their first international title, and I want to recognize this to everyone, I've expanded and rephrase the sentences, but I want more opinion to make this page, outstanding to the readers.

Thanks, FairyTailRocks (talk) 09:59, 17 September 2013 (UTC)


 * I had a quick glance at the article, and I realized that there are no text about the matches in the tournament; you should add a decent paragraph called "tournament summary" or similar. 1930 FIFA World Cup is a similar article that has FA-status, you should have a look at that one to see how it could be done, though I understand that it is hard to add as much information for a minor tournament like this. A good article should also meet WP:LEAD, which means that only the most important aspects of the article should be summarized in the lead and citations should only be in the body of the article. Hope this helps, Mentoz86 (talk) 11:16, 17 September 2013 (UTC)


 * Currently working on it. ✅ FairyTailRocks (talk) 11:30, 17 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Your edits was correctly reverted. The citations in the lead shouldn't be removed, but you should move them into the body of the article. The main text should consist of well-sourced prose, while the lead should be a summary of the prose (without citations). The text you added in the "tournament summary", should also be sourced. If sources doesn't exists, then it is no point to try to get this article to GA. Mentoz86 (talk) 09:39, 28 September 2013 (UTC)