Wikipedia:Peer review/2018 Pacific hurricane season/archive1

2018 Pacific hurricane season


I've listed this article for peer review because it is an article on WikiProject:Tropical cyclone's vital article list and is the flagship article for the future featured topic of the same name. , if you would be willing to take a look at the prose of the article (for sentence structure/grammar as well as accuracy), it would be greatly appreciated. I am trying to prepare the article for FAC. If anyone else would like to chime in, feel free to do so.

Thanks, Noah Talk 22:20, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

Comments from KN2731
Prose issues from a brief read-through:
 * Be consistent in capitalizing eastern/central Pacific vs Eastern/Central Pacific
 * Done. Noah Talk 22:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * When punctuating a sentence, en dashes should be spaced (see MOS:DASH). I've only seen this appear in the season summary
 * Done. Noah Talk 22:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Date Line or Dateline?
 * Fixed. Noah Talk 22:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Check diacritic consistency e.g. Michoacán
 * Should be fixed. Noah Talk 22:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Possible overlinking for locations e.g. Oaxaca
 * Move extratropical link from 96C to Walaka's section; link eyewall replacement cycle and Sonora somewhere; link Four Corners region
 * Done. Noah Talk 21:42, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Last sentence of season summary needs fixing
 * Should be fixed. Noah Talk 21:42, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * This too: Although a total of four tropical depressions formed, only two became storms formed–Fabio and Gilma
 * Removed formed. Noah Talk 21:42, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Walaka's part in the season summary looks a little fragmented, since formation and peak are separated by most of the last paragraph
 * Moved them to be together. Noah Talk 21:42, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

May leave more comments later. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 12:23, 9 October 2020 (UTC)
 * In addition, many global computer models expected a positive Pacific decadal oscillation (PDO), a phase of a multi-decade cycle that favored much warmer than average sea surface temperatures that had been ongoing since 2014 to continue, in contrast to the 1995–2013 period, which featured below-normal activity. Too much info in one sentence
 * Split and fixed up. Noah Talk 22:18, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Highest ACE Pacific hurricane seasons needs a source (probably HURDAT)
 * Done. Noah Talk 22:07, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * September saw the formation of five tropical cyclone – plural
 * Fixed. Noah Talk 22:18, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * making landfall in Sinaloa, Mexico, in late-October – not directly preceding a noun, doesn't need hyphen
 * Removed the hypen. Noah Talk 22:18, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Bud) excessive mid-level moisture – from my reading "excessive" sounds like the air was supersaturated. Also maybe give a little more detail to Heavy rainfall from Bud killed a child in Mexico City.
 * Done. Noah Talk 22:18, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Carlotta) Right now it's not clear how conditions allowed for strengthening, did wind shear decrease after June 15?
 * The storm simply overcame the shear which is what is expressed. Noah Talk 13:29, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Daniel) The dissipating Tropical Storm Carlotta dragged a part of the ITCZ northward. An area of thunderstorms formed on June 18 – first sentence seems out of place, if causation exists change to something like "This resulted in the formation of an area of t-storms on June 18"
 * Done. Noah Talk 13:29, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Fabio) After 12 hours at peak intensity, Fabio began to decay as a result of having tracked into a region of cooler sea surface temperatures; the storm later rapidly weakened as it moved over even colder sea temperatures – a value for SSTs may be helpful
 * We don't have one in TCR so I will add some advisories. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:29, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Check capitalization for Kelvin Wave/wave
 * Done. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:29, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Hector) as the Johnston Atoll – is "the" necessary?
 * Removed. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:29, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Lane) this intensity made Lane the fifth storm to achieve Category 5 status in the central Pacific – clarify that this is in recorded history and not for the year; 9,000,000 US gal (30,000,000 L) of raw sewage – spell out and link units, may also be better to change to "9 million" and "30 million"
 * Did everything except link them per the MOS. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:54, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Miriam) its low-level center became entirely pregnable – I don't think pregnable can be used that way
 * Changed to vulnerable. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:54, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Olivia) Lanai and Lanai City, Hawaii exist, also occurring at the Lanai Airport Lanai Airport is a proper noun and "the" isn't needed
 * Done. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:54, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (19E) link Guaymas and Ciudad Obregón
 * Linked. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:54, 19 October 2020 (UTC)


 * (Vicente) link Playa Azul (Michoacán) and Coatzacoalcos River
 * Done. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:54, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

That should be it. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 15:55, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Haven't looked at refs, but check for the same mistakes pointed out in past FACs
 * Will work on this later in the week. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 20:39, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Should be able to do this on Saturday and/or Sunday. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:42, 17 October 2020 (UTC)