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A (For 100 Cars)


I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to hear a variety of opinions on its prose style and comprehensiveness, with a focus towards aiming for FAC if possible. I have mined every source I can find but would like to test the waters before going to FAC with a shorter article.

Thanks to anyone who helps out, Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 01:57, 19 November 2023 (UTC)

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 * STANDARD NOTE: I have added this PR to the Template:FAC peer review sidebar to get quicker and more responses. When this PR is closed, please remove it from the list. Also, consider adding the sidebar to your userpage to help others discover pre-FAC PRs, and please review other articles in that template. Thanks, Z1720 (talk) 00:02, 20 November 2023 (UTC)

, all done, lovely work yet again! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 12:26, 20 November 2023 (UTC)
 * MyCatIsAChonk
 * I wonder about the tense of the first sentence: "A [For 100 Cars] was a minimalist composition..." typically, compositions exist in the present tense, since they don't disappear, but I understand how this one is unique. Perhaps "A [For 100 Cars] was a minimalist site-specific project..." is more fitting, though that doesn't mention the music part
 * For the American audience, might be worth linking car park
 * - is "Porshes" misspelled intentionally?
 * Make a new redirect called LA: Cars + Music that points to the subsection of this article
 * - what's the "Magic Circle" algorithm? If the following sentence defines it, draw that connection
 * - I assume noise-cancelling?
 * - merge: "The performance of A [For 100 Cars] took place on 15 October 2017 at a multi-storey car park at 131 South Olive Street, Los Angeles, opposite the Walt Disney Concert Hall."
 * Make sure that works names in citation titles are italicized too (e.g. A [continuum] in ref 1 and the name of this work in ref 12)


 * @MyCatIsAChonk, these should now be done:
 * Changed to "was a site-specific project created by Ryoji Ikeda. It took the form of a piece of minimalist music...". Thoughts?
 * Linked both occurrences of multi-storey car park, I think this is enough
 * Porshes was a pretty bad spelling mistake...
 * Redirect created at LA Cars + Music due to technical restrictions (interwiki links)
 * Added some context with a reference from the Stanford professor Emeritus Julius Orion Smith
 * No sources say any more than this, I assume that this is the case. I've added "large" to try and get the point across
 * Merged
 * Done
 * Thanks again and congratulations on the promotion of The Firebird! Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 19:15, 20 November 2023 (UTC)
 * All good- ping me at the FAC! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 21:01, 20 November 2023 (UTC)

Query by Z1720
It has been over a month since the last comment. Are you still interested in receiving feedback? If not, can you close this PR? Thanks, Z1720 (talk) 05:25, 2 January 2024 (UTC)


 * Hi @Z1720, I was interested in getting more feedback but as there's been low participation I think I'll just close this. Thanks for the heads up. All the best, Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 10:35, 2 January 2024 (UTC)