Wikipedia:Peer review/A Mind Forever Voyaging/archive1

A Mind Forever Voyaging
I have been following the progression of this page for a few months now, in addition to editing it under an anonymous IP. This page covers the plot of the game in good detail, as well as being stylishly written; assuming, as it is mentioned, that the player follows the plot to successful completion.

On a personal note, this game is a classic to me, and I'm sure it is to a fair number of others on Wikipedia as well. In conclusion, I hope that this page will eventually reach featured status, if it is deemed acceptable. Viewer 11:25, 4 October 2005 (UTC)

good article! my issues: otherwise fine! Niz 19:08, 5 October 2005 (UTC)
 * unwikilink the red links, they dont need articles
 * some more pictures would be good, maybe one of them a screenshot (yes i know its a text adventure)
 * The pgraph starting "Also in the fictional year..." doesnt fit in with the rest of the pgraph. It describes the game milieu but what is the politics behind it? what is meretzky saying by making greece anti-american?
 * there is v. little on the gameplay elements - how does the game make you role-play, and make the story progress? is there a scoring mechanism? how is the parser compared to other infocom if?
 * would be nice to see some excerpts from magazine reviews from the time of release? was it universally acclaimed? were there any detractors? did it win any awards?
 * "not a commercial success" - expand this
 * references!