Wikipedia:Peer review/Abortion/First paragraph/archive1

Abortion
Specifically, I believe the first paragraph, of the definition of the article needs to be address by a wider audience. The previous consensus reached was between a relatively limited number of users for such a controversial topic.

The central issue that surrounds the revived debate is that the word "death" has an unnecessary emotional undertone which is not needed to define the procedure, while also unduly slanting the article from a purely objective point of view. While several other side issues have also come to light, such as removal of the word "Mother" or "Child" from the article, I am requesting this peer review specifically to address the concern of the wording for the definition of what abortion is. The apparent points of view surfacing in the revived debate are thus:


 * 1) A consensus was already reached, leave the definition alone.
 * 2) A consensus was reached between a small group of editors, and because of the smaller size reflected a disproportionately large representation of one group over another.

This can be seen in the initial straw poll that was taken:

In the poll a 3 to 1 majority of options reflected the use of the word "death" as opposed to "terminated" even though it was a central theme of the discussion. Note: 2 of the options (8 & 9) in the poll were not included, and 1 option was lumped in with referring to death because it uses "preventing a live birth" which directly infers death.

The discussion is taking place on an archive page here:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Abortion/First_paragraph#Neutrality_of_the_first_paragraph

Toastysoul 22:17, 12 July 2007 (UTC)


 * Malformed: This peer review is malformed, and is not linked on the article talk page. I attempted to link it to the talk page, but was unable to find the secret code; it needs to be moved/renamed to the standard.  Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 18:32, 28 July 2007 (UTC)
 * It's linked here: Talk:Abortion/First paragraph. DrKiernan 07:22, 9 August 2007 (UTC)