Wikipedia:Peer review/Actuary/archive1

Actuary
''Note: please add your suggestions in a 5th level heading under "Suggestions" and any actions taken under actions. Thanks. -- Avi 20:15, 21 June 2006 (UTC)

Lincher
The article has been improved to the point that it now listed as a good article. I would like to do my best to improve and develop the article, if necessary, to bring it to featured status, and thus any and all constructive criticism and advice is welcomed. Thank you. -- Avi 19:42, 18 June 2006 (UTC)
 * These are some minor avenues that can be explored :

Lincher 20:34, 18 June 2006 (UTC)
 * Needs more inline citations.
 * Needs a broader coverage (international ... other countries).
 * Adding pictures would be a plus (like an actuarian sitting at his desk).
 * Are there actuarians' organisms?
 * The Disciplines section should be expanded, including examples and problems actuarians have with the job.
 * Laws pertaining to actuarians?
 * Notable actuarians? if there are any?

False Prophet
If it hasn't all ready been done, the article should be copy edited for spelling errors.

other ideas:
 * See WP:LEAD as the intro should adequtely summarize the article.
 * The see also section, External links, and Categories should be Alphbitize.
 * You should double check the articles talk page to see if all complaints have been taken care of.
 * You should look over the following articles for advice:
 * User:AndyZ/Suggestions
 * WP:WIAFA
 * User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a
 * You may want to go to WP:FA and take a look at similar articles that are all ready featured for ways to improve it.

False Prophet 22:09, 18 June 2006 (UTC)

Enchanter
Some brief initial comments: Enchanter 22:19, 18 June 2006 (UTC) (I am a qualified actuary with a long-standing involvement in writing this article)
 * Overall this article is good - for example it is much more extensive and relevant than the corresponding Britannica article (which is three paragraphs or so of basic information only)
 * The article could very much benefit from a section on the history of the actuarial profession; at the moment, there is very little on the way of history and I think there needs to be for this to be a complete and balanced encyclopedia article.
 * The section on credentialing goes into perhaps more detail than warranted for a general article on actuaries; I think much of this material would be more appropriate if moved elsewhere, perhaps into the articles about the relevant actuarial associations (Society of Actuaries etc.). A paragraph or two on credentialing should be enough.

Andyzbot

 * The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and may or may not be accurate for the article in question (due to possible javascript errors/uniqueness of articles).


 * Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.


 * Please alphabetize the categories and interlanguage links.


 * There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.


 * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
 * You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions (and the javascript checklist; see the last paragraph in the lead) for further ideas.
 * Thanks, Andy t 15:29, 19 June 2006 (UTC)

History

 * I have added a pretty detailed history section, based mostly on the FIFA webpage, but with a number of supporting citations including Halley's documnet of 1693. I agree that it adds a lot. This also serves the purpose of increasing the number of citations. -- Avi 20:15, 21 June 2006 (UTC)


 * I have started a list of notable actuaries. I do not want for it to get too long, as it would make the artile unwieldly. -- Avi 16:37, 22 June 2006 (UTC)


 * I have moved the specific credentialing information to the articles of the societies themselves, streamlined the portion of it in Actuary, and added a small paragraph about other countries for completeness sake. -- Avi 16:37, 22 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Added public domain image of Hurricane Katrina damage as lead picture. -- Avi 17:19, 22 June 2006 (UTC)


 * I have decided against looking into specific laws, as in my opinion that is beyond the scope of the article, similar to the specific credentialing requirements. If an article about Actuaries and Laws are created, it would deserve a heading and a link. Common problems are also beyond the scope of a general article on actuaries, I think, and more properlyshould be in articles like "reserve valuation", "premium calculation", "mortality analysis" etc. -- Avi 17:34, 22 June 2006 (UTC)


 * Copyedited and spellchecked. I am going to close the peer review and nominate the article for candidacy. Thank you all very much! -- Avi 20:21, 22 June 2006 (UTC)

To-do

 * add history of profession
 * list of famous actuaries
 * move credentialling to appropriate society pages (in-progress)
 * copyedit
 * alphabetize
 * try and find more usable images
 * briefly discuss/expand laws or common problems