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Agatha, wife of Edward the Exile
This peer review discussion has been closed. Agatha, wife of Edward the Exile I've listed this article for peer review because it needs a re-evaluation based on its current contents.

Thanks, Bearpatch (talk) 18:24, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 08:04, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
 * For anything like GA etc, you'd need to expand the lead a bit, per WP:LEAD I reckon a couple of paras would do the job.
 * Image captions that aren't complete sentences don't need full stops.
 * Although not mandated by most processes, it would be good to see alt text with the images.
 * "issue of Agatha's paternity" just "her" paternity would be fine.
 * "She came to England with her husband ..." as this is the main body, you at least rename the husband and possibly even expand upon his role.
 * Newcastle upon Tyne doesn't have hyphens.
 * "Simeon of Durham [2]" avoid spaces before references.
 * Before text like "thaes ceseres maga, filia germani imperatoris Henrici" I would be tempted to put "Latin:"
 * "to bear on the question" what question?
 * Forgive my ignorance but what is the relevance of the names on the family trees that appear in italics?
 * Giselle or Gisela, be consistent.
 * "As tempting as it may be to thus view .... " not really encyclopedic writing.
 * Last two paras of "Kievan theory" section are unreferenced.
 * Online refs need publisher info, access dates etc where possible.
 * I would split footnotes from references.
 * Page ranges need an en-dash, not a hyphen.
 * Foreign language references should specify which language they're in.
 * Be consistent, is it "pp" or "pp."?