Wikipedia:Peer review/Age of Mythology/archive1

Age of Mythology
User:Giggy asked for this to go through the featured article process again, but he enlisted me for help. Anyways, from looking at the article, I believe it is nicely done and well cited. However, I do not work on gaming articles much, so I don't know what either I or Giggy needs to do in order to make this FA material. Thanks in advance. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) 08:20, 27 July 2007 (UTC)

Spebi's review

Great article, whoever has worked on it has obviously put in a great deal of time to perfect it.

In no particular order:
 * Soundtrack: I recommend sourcing the track listing, as I can see that it might become a target for random text or false soundtrack titles. Also in that section, there are a couple of unsourced quotes that need to be sourced: try googling the quote, wrapped in quotation marks, and you should receive really good sources.
 * Gameplay: Try adding more information to the image captions. Instead of just "The Age of Mythology scenario editor.", use "The Age of Mythology scenario editor: visible are (list advanced features not included in Age of Empires), (some other statement that tells readers that the scenario editor is much more complex than the one in AOE).", or similar.
 * Reception: Section is very well sourced, however, I see a few issues here and there: "Website users rated the game 8.2 out of 10", with ref 34 attached to it, seems a bit, ugh. Who are these "website users"? What else did they say about the game other than just a rating of 8.2 out of 10? It also seems a bit odd, just hanging on the end of the paragraph... just noticed, it is included again earlier in the same paragraph, with the same ref 34 added on the end. Also, alot of the refs are either before the full-stop, or between two full-stops (how does that work out?), and some of the statements have no full-stop at all. I recommend fixing up some of the prose in that section, mainly, joining sentences that could sound better joined, and not separate.
 * Buildings: try and join up these paragraphs (which are actually just 1 or 2 sentences, then a line break), to make that section look a bit more presentable.
 * If you are interested in citing some of those other detailed areas in the game that can't be cited using online material, you may want to purchase the official AOM guide released by Microsoft (I'm sure there is one), or that book that comes with AOM when you buy it, or another reliable game-guide that isn't online.
 * Would a walkthrough I wrote for the game count? I vaguely recall seeing such things in other articles, but this could be a COI issue... Giggy  UCP 08:57, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * Uh, well since you wrote it, it doesn't really pass as verifiable, as it is a self-published source. You'd have to check up on this with someone else, I'm afraid. Sebi  &#91; talk &#93; 09:50, 28 July 2007 (UTC)
 * I found the official track list and added a citation for it. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) 04:20, 29 July 2007 (UTC)
 * Ref 22 is cited 3 times, yet it is completely blank.
 * Oops, fixed. Giggy  UCP 08:57, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * "Four months after its release, Age of Mythology went platinum, selling over 1,000,000 units." – pretty big claim, and yet I see no ref tag next to it. I'm pretty sure that it is correct, I've seen it either in the article already (sourced) or somewhere online, but it needs to have that [#] tag next to it.

Sebi &#91; talk &#93; 08:46, 27 July 2007 (UTC)