Wikipedia:Peer review/Ahmose I/archive1

Ahmose I
A general review for clarity and good english language stuff would be a good idea, I think. Ultimatly, I and another editor want to see this be a good article and potentially a featured article, and we have both exhausted our own resources and would prefer to have solid books by doctorate posessing Egyptologists, so if there are any obvious holes that need to be filled in, it would be good to neatly and clearly identify them, because filling them will require some pretty deep reasearch. ThanksThanatosimii 01:41, 24 July 2006 (UTC)
 * It's difficult to know how much more info is out there, but the only obvious gap is in the monuments section: In Upper Egypt, he built at the temple of Amun at Karnak, and at the temple of Monthu at Armant. Considering these are listed as his major monuments in the infobox it would be nice to see more than a sentence on them. Aside from that it is a well-written interesting and well referenced article. Yomangani 11:37, 25 July 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 01:46, 26 July 2006 (UTC)