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Air (visual novel)
I have requested a peer review to Air (visual novel) so that perhaps the article could be built up to Featured Article status. (  十   八  ) 02:19, 16 January 2007 (UTC)

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 * Lack of Japanese reviews is going to kill it. We've got to figure out how to counteract that.--SeizureDog 03:18, 16 January 2007 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure I entirely agree when looking at such featured articles as Serial Experiments Lain and Excel Saga that seem to have almost no Japanese reviews of the series. (  十   八  ) 07:58, 16 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Excel Saga got a lot of flak about it though. I was actually surprised it was able to pass with those objects still unanswered. Plus, I think the FA reviewers might expect reviews for a game more than a TV show. Additionally, considering the series has not been licensed outside of Japan, I think reviewers may be less lenient. Filling up with a bunch of reviews for an English release is one thing, but only having English reviews of a Japanese exclusive is a bit unbalanced. All I'm saying is that the issue is bound to come up in a FAC, so we should try to deal with it ahead of time.--SeizureDog 09:50, 16 January 2007 (UTC)