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Alan Dale

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I got this article to GA a while back, and would like to improve it further. Any comments at all are welcomed, but the most important thing is that the article needs a free-use image of Dale. If you have one, or can obtain one somehow, it would be incredibly useful.

Thanks, Gran2 11:40, 6 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment, I've just added a fair use rationale image, but I still think the article could use some more illustrations. That aside the article seems fine, maybe you should make it a FAc. -- Music 26/  11  12:25, 7 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I suppose one fair-use image is okay, thanks. As for FAC, not yet, I want to improve it, but I'm not a fan of FAs of living people. Gran2 12:56, 7 September 2008 (UTC)
 * It's your call, good luck with further expansion. -- Music 26/  11  13:50, 7 September 2008 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: By and large, this reads well. I have two suggestions for improvement.
 * A once-over by a copyeditor would be a good idea. The article contains many small errors or awkward phrasings. Examples include the use of "ident" and "killed off", which are probably slang, and phrases like "upon which Spamalot is 'lovingly ripped off' from". "Learnt" should be "learned". A copyeditor would probably catch redundancies such as "Dale went over to the station...", in which "over" has no function. A fresh eye would catch things like "...he regrets not spend enough time with them."


 * The "Personal life" section might be a place for expansion. I wondered about Dale's hobbies, sports interests, travels, and work with charities or political groups or other organizations. Maybe he still likes rugby or rides a motorcycle or excels at golf. It would make the article more interesting if you could find details like this that can be sourced.

If you found this brief review helpful, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the peer-review backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 03:37, 11 September 2008 (UTC)