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Albert Luthuli


I've listed this article for peer review because I want to eventually have it listed as a good article. I have never edited an entire Wikipedia article, only tiny pieces before this. So I want to know if all the sections flow well together; if any sections need to be split up, or maybe merged; if the lead is fine; and most importantly, if I meet Wikipedia's manual of style.

Thanks, Iamawesomeautomatic (talk) 23:03, 1 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments by Z1720
Here are some comments after a quick skim:

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 * The lede is too long. Per MOS:LEDELENGTH aim for 3-4 paragraphs, max.
 * Second paragraph at the end of Early life needs a citation at the end.
 * Suggest adding alt text to images, per MOS:ALT
 * Ensure that there is no space between a punctuation mark and a footnote
 * "With more restrictions put in place, the ANC leaders decided to end the campaign in January 1953." Needs a citation

I hope this helps. This article looks good so far, and can probably be nominated when the above are addressed. Z1720 (talk) 19:23, 2 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your peer review comments. They've been very helpful. Iamawesomeautomatic (talk) 02:43, 3 October 2022 (UTC)