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American Life
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… I have already fixed the problem of sources and I have arranged the tables

Thanks, Tb hotch Talk 2 Me 07:22, 15 February 2010 (UTC)

Well my grammars not really good but here are things that sound strange to me. ✅
 * Comments by DragonZero
 * The second paragraph in the lead, using But to start a sentence sound strange, maybe it should be combined.
 * Album Information section.
 * "Is often considered a concept album with its recurring themes of the American Dream and materialism." Sentence seems fishy.
 * "Madonna started recording the album in 2002, after filming the movie Swept Away. While recording the album in London, England, she also worked on other projects, such as her West-End appearance in the play, Up For Grabs, and filming her cameo-appearance in the James Bond film Die Another Day." Seems irrevalent to the album itself.

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 * Downloads sections
 * "It is unknown who hacked the website, although many investigations lead that the hacking was a result after Madonna leaked faked song titles, as it was a prank to insult Madonna's way of counter-attacking illegal downloads." Original Research, though obvious.

✅ "According to unconfirmed reports, the photo shoot cost 415,000 U.S Dollars."- Meaning no source?
 * Title and Cover

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 * Reception
 * "received mixed or average reviews", sound strange and not certain.

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 * "At the end of the video is shown, then President George W. Bush." Grammar.

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 * Overall
 * Seems like it needs a copy edit, some refs need to be placed in some places. And the reference dates should be changed to month, day, year. DragonZero (talk · contribs) 09:15, 20 February 2010 (UTC)

Comments ✅ ✅ (I guess) Tb hotch Talk 2 Me 23:29, 22 February 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) The certifications table should be modified as per List of music recording sales certifications. See The Fame for the modification. --Legolas  ( talk 2 me ) 07:51, 22 February 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) The lead needs to conform to WP:LEAD. --Legolas  ( talk 2 me ) 07:51, 22 February 2010 (UTC)