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Anemospilia
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because i think it would be better for everyone to suggest changes, i re wrote most of the article from scratch and i wanted people to help improve it.

Thanks, Tom.mevlie (talk) 04:03, 2 March 2008 (UTC)


 * Great work here but I do have a couple suggestions. First, consider using inline citations (see WP:CITE or footnotes; it'll give the article a bit more heft. Consider adding a few more wikilinks too, as per WP:BUILD. Also, now that the article has some bulk to it, consider expanding the intro per WP:LEAD. I'd also suggest that many of your sections are very short. Consider combining each of the sections on the chambers into one main section, and each "wing", if you will, as subsections. The biggest problem in this article is the "conclusion" - it screams original research, which is a definite no-no (it also makes it sound like it's written like a high school essay). If you need more specific comments, feel free to ask. --Midnightdreary (talk) 15:08, 7 March 2008 (UTC)