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Auckland Zoo

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I've listed this article for peer review because…

I want to get it to GA or FA standard, any comments or edits would be appreciated.

Thanks,

ZoofanNZ (talk) 01:38, 27 January 2008 (UTC)


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Hello, I'll make a few comments which may help on the way to GA. Hope these help. Feel free to get in touch with me. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:32, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
 * "Auckland Zoo" or "Auckland Zoological Park"?
 * Headings should be per WP:HEAD so "Early History" should be "Early history".
 * Date ranges should be separated by en-dash (e.g. 1939–45 is preferred over 1939 - 1945).
 * "The zoo..." is used a lot in the lead, mix it up a bit.
 * Consider merging the final paragraph of the lead - it's a bit short on its own.
 * "history of the Auckland Zoo begins " - not storytime, encyclopaedia time so use the past tense.
 * Citations should be used in-line, if you're using a book then use Cite book and specify the page number(s) used for the claims in the article.
 * "bleak and uninspiring " - is this your opinion (WP:OR) or a quotation (cite it)?
 * I believe I'm right in saying you should use "1930s" not "1930's".
 * Several short paragraphs in history sections could be better worked together.
 * Quite a lot of "it was believed to...", "she was believed to..." - by whom? This is where citation is important.
 * " (see Current Zoo). " - nasty, not required.
 * Animals suddenly become capitalised in the 1960's onwards... why?
 * "However a much spectacular short term exhibit was being investigated." don't understand this sentence.
 * Recent History section is a lot of very short paragraphs. It needs work.
 * 980m2 - sort this out.
 * " $4.6 million" - NZ dollars?
 * "Te Wao Nui " - why bulleted and bold? Then a dollar value with no symbol.
 * Gallery is way over the top.
 * Too many external links, they're not necessary. If they're used for citation then consider the Cite web template.