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Australian Football League

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I think that this article should be nominated for a fetured article candidate very soon. Its a great game, and the league its self does need some promotion. Any feedback would be great!

Thanks, Aflumpire (talk) 09:34, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:21, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments
 * Six paras in the lead is too much - see WP:LEAD for guidance.
 * Not sure you need to link sport here.
 * sixteen->16.
 * "six Australian states - with matches played in all states" - use the en-dash here instead of the hyphen, and also, I assume you'll explain that if games are played in all six states that must mean some kind of exhibition-style matches are played when both teams are out of their state?
 * TV ->television.
 * Don't overlink Australian Rules Football in the lead.
 * "of New South Wales,Queensland " - space after the comma - and check you don't overlink the Aussie states all over the lead.
 * Images seem to overwhelm some of the article - see WP:MOS for guidance on sizing images.
 * Clubs section has no references and too many paras again -look at merging some of the smaller ones.
 * "Home Ground and (Capacity)" - Home ground and (capacity).
 * Explain Membership.
 * And 2008 Membership should just be membership.
 * Just as Premiership Years should be years.
 * Premiership years col doesn't sort - it sends me up to the top of the article.
 * If a team has had more than one home ground, you should at least footnote it.
 * Year ranges should use an en-dash, not hyphen per WP:DASH.
 * "Reason for Leaving" - leaving. "Years In Competition" competition. "Last Home Ground" - Last home ground. etc etc.
 * New Teams section - New teams. And why bold the two teams?  And use the en dash again.
 * "AFL boss " - boss isn't particularly encyclopedic.
 * Stadiums section needs work...
 * Why square brackets?
 * Perhaps consider a table or even forking to a sub-article.
 * There's little referencing.
 * Total Player Payment in bold? Why?
 * "The following is the origin of 2007 AFL listed player based on player's nominated junior clubs" - is this trivia?
 * Toyota logo could use a caption.
 * Season structure section is referenceless.
 * Competition timeline fails to render.