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Battle of Trenton

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I've done a lot of work on it and I want to see what people think.

Thanks, Red4tribe (talk) 15:51, 28 July 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 02:36, 5 August 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article and needs to be expanded to 2 -3 paragraphs. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
 * Article has several short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that need to be combined with others or expanded - they interrupt the flow as it is now
 * Article is generally well cited, but repeated refs can instead use the, then the next time the ref is used just put in <ref name = "blah"/ . Also make sure the internet refs meet WP:RS
 * I am not an expert on this, but Legacy could be expanded to include the annual reenactment of Washington's Crossing of the Delaware (Grace Kelly's brother played George for years) or the Washington Crossing parks in PA and NJ. You might want to ask the Military Histopry Wikiproject for a review and for a copyedit at WP:PRV