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Battle of Wadi (1916)

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for October 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. What would this article need to get to GA status?

Thanks,  Flewis (talk) 11:37, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Choess comments:

I'm not really sure what the usual GA standards are for military articles. A few things I noticed:
 * The lede needs a bit of work. "Pushed" is a rather informal phrasing. "considered as a" should be "considered a". Refer to Aylmer by his last name, and explain why his losses led good old Townshend of Chitral to surrender.
 * In the background section, you've given Townshend the wrong rank!
 * The grammar needs a little tightening generally. The opening sentence of "Battle of Wadi" seems rather disjointed.
 * And...I just noticed a copyvio from 1914-1918.net at the bottom of that section. Stop, do not pass go, until you're sure the whole article is originally worded. Sorry. Choess (talk) 04:39, 5 October 2008 (UTC)