Wikipedia:Peer review/Battleship/archive1

Battleship
I think this is FA quality, but I need to know what my peers think first. Gang sta  E  B  20:31, 8 July 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, Andy t 23:49, 9 July 2006 (UTC)


 * Overall it looks pretty good. I just have a few minor comments.
 * The first paragraph begins by stating that the name battleship was applied from the 15th to the 20th century. The second sentence then state that it evolved from ships spanning the 16th through the 20th century. Which one is it?
 * The expression "ruled the waves" may not be clear to some people, especially those who have not studied naval history. Would "controlled all ocean-based commerce" be clearer? Or at least explain what "ruled the waves" means.
 * Please link Galley, Age of Sail
 * The statement "Royal Navy based promotion on merit rather than lordship" seems questionable to me. Is there a reference that could be cited to back this up?
 * Only a few of the sections use in-line citations. It would be preferable if these were used throughout.
 * In a few places the page has links directly to web sites. E.g. following "partially carbonized". It would be preferable if these used the standard in-line citations, along with the cite web template.
 * Thanks. &mdash; RJH (talk) 14:59, 10 July 2006 (UTC)