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Bianca Ryan
Even having been through the WP:FA process three times, I'd very much like some extra eyes on this article before deciding whether to test its FA-worthiness. Thanks in advance to all who offer their thoughts. :) RadioKirk (u|t|c)  00:41, 4 December 2006 (UTC)


 * It's a decent article, although it seems a little early in her career to build a conclusive story.
 * I'd like to see the introduction say a little more about her biography, brief as it is, rather than dwelling on critical praise.
 * Too many red links. Many of them may not be needed; at least those that are not notable.
 * Reference before the punctuation: "[5],"
 * I don't think the "Footnotes" sub-section tag is really necessary in the "References" section. It's considered bad form to only have one sub-section within a section.
 * Thanks. &mdash; RJH (talk) 17:43, 4 December 2006 (UTC)


 * Thanks! I, too think it may be early, but it's quite comprehensive for a new artist. May I make some comments?
 * From the times I've been through WP:FAC, leads are supposed to briefly describe who the person is and why they're notable; I thought this one nailed it&mdash;and still do. ;)
 * I've often seen FAC comments about the introduction being too brief, so I thought I'd mention it.
 * The length of the article is the determining factor per WP:LEAD; it will need more there as it grows, certainly. Thanks. :)
 * I tried to link only to the most likely near-future articles; I'll look it over again. :) (Edit: I believe each is sufficiently notable for its own article in the near future; feel free to point out any with which you disagree, with my thanks.)
 * My experience has been that too many red links generate issues in the FAC. I'd recommend either setting up suitable stubs, or just removing the link.
 * That's a good suggestion, thank you.
 * I've always done ref before punct except at ends of sentences; no one's mentioned it before... ;) (Edit: I just checked four featureds at random&mdash;Arrested Development (TV series), Vivien Leigh, Sunset Blvd. (1950 film) and Music of the United States&mdash;and all refs follow punct. Now I'm confused... [grin])
 * Footnotes
 * Okay, following commas and closing parentheses is where I'm not on the same page. ;)
 * I always wondered about that, but it looked worse without, to me, because they are footnotes. I'll check similar articles, thanks.
 * I've been slammed for that in a FAC, so I thought I'd make mention. But, otherwise, I have no idea where that is documented. &mdash; RJH (talk) 17:54, 5 December 2006 (UTC)
 * Already fixed after a review of other featureds. Anyway, great comments, and thanks again. :) RadioKirk (u|t|c)  18:02, 5 December 2006 (UTC)
 * RadioKirk (u|t|c)  17:54, 4 December 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 22:24, 4 December 2006 (UTC)