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Big Bang (band)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to make this article at least to GA status. However a lot of constructive criticism is needed to find all the mistakes. I hope that fellow editors can help find faults and help me improve this page.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, +  n   pervez  ☂ 21:16, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

GinaGucci

 * The "Artistry and influences" section needs more work. The tiny paragraph before "Musical styles" is referenced, but needs to be expanded to make it more effective.  It stated that the group received praises from "critics, fans, and other singers alike", but does not state who the critics were and what they said.  It's not bad to mention what fans and singer says about the band, but preferably music critic.  The lead category has the word "influences" in it, but I can hardly find what they influence at all.  If it's going to be in the category, then at least concentrate on it.  If not, it can be taken out.
 * For the "Musical styles" part, it stated that Big Bang's musical style can be classified for the most part as hip-hop (as seen with the songs "La, La, La" and "Goodbye Baby"), with a little vibe of R&B (as seen with the songs "We Belong Together" and "Forever With You"), mainstream ("This Love") music, and rock with "Oh My Friend". Are those opinions from the editors, or is it a fact? I would also like to see what kinds of themes the group touched upon in their music and what their lyrics say (since it was stated several time that G-Dragon wrote their lyrics).  I think it would also be appropriate to also mention about their music videos and how it portray their music.  And what about their live performances or concerts?  Are they lavish about it and include props?  Are there any creativity in their performances as a group?
 * The "Dance" section needs to be expanded as well, and that includes more sources. Is the group into choreographed dance, or not? What do critics think of them as a dance group?
 * The "Image and cultural impact" is okay, but the first paragraph has few source so I don't know if those are true or not of the group. (I am not a fan so I would not know).  I would like to see expansion of that section as well, especially on what they influence as a group (the only mention of it directly is the Nike and Reebok high-top shoes).


 * In the "History" category, it is well-sourced, though I found the word "activities" used often. I would also like to see a brief description about their albums, and what the group think of it as they released it.  Did it represent their ideas and emotions?  What kinds of music was included on that album?  And what did critics feel about it?  Did the group did something on it that is different than their previous materials?

The article is not bad and represents a fairly neutral point of view about the group. I think its rating of a "B" suits it, but it is not near being a "Good Article". I would look to GA articles such as Aerosmith or The Cure if you're lost on where to take this (since those are about band groups as well). Until then, good luck and keep it up!GinaGucci (talk) 20:58, 24 January 2010 (UTC)