Wikipedia:Peer review/Big Walnut High School/archive1

Big Walnut High School
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because…
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for May 2008.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for May 2008.

I really want to get this article up to GA status on WP:WPSCH, if not on WP:GA. Anything, and I mean anything that you can suggest would be awesome.

Thanks, Ejg930 (talk) 16:28, 3 May 2008 (UTC)

PEER REVIEW - chzz

Nice little article, generally.

A picture or two would be nice. The crest, or a pic of the school?

Suggest 'High school' links to High_school#United_States so that US info is given

"School Information" contains the word "school" too many times...I know it's in the name(s), but it's a bit much!

In "Academics" =- don't abbreviate to "BWHS" - better to say "The school..."

In "Athletics" you need to say the name of the team at the beginning

After "Ohio Capital Conference" you should put "(OCC)", so that when you usee the abbreviation later, it makes sense

I didn't immediately understand the part reading; "Ohio High School Athletic Association State Championships

* Boys Golf – 2002 [1] * Varsity Football- 2007 [2]

...are these awards presented by OCC? Maybe it should be titled "awards" or "achievements"?

What's FFA in external links?

HTH,

Chzz (talk) 13:09, 6 May 2008 (UTC)