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Bill Evans
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I've worked much on it. At first it was somewhat of a listing of the albums he recorded in prose. I've added references, photos, removed subjectivity and added details of Evans's personal life and how they influenced his output.

Well, my request of review is for the following things:


 * 1) I've some doubts about the structure of the article. I mean, at first it was only about albums and collaborations. Now I've added along other personal details and such (marriages, drug addiction...). So, should both professional and personal life be fused in a section named simply "biography" or create a separate one named "personal life"?
 * 2) Check ortography (I'm somewhat dyslexic XD).
 * 3) The text may be somewhat patchy and disconnected, since it has been modyfied a lot with small contributions. Also, I'm not a native English speaker. Thus, could somebody suggest improvements on the writing style? (but without removing stuff).
 * 4) The section about his musical style should of course be expanded, but has anybody sourced material for this?

(Also, check the conversation I had with Dr. Blofeld).

Thanks, Fauban  12:41, 27 July 2012 (UTC)